Emerson

This was....a rather obscure thing to read, for me. No, I do not think it is fiction. It sits well with the term prose , although some people use that ...

I like the general idea. But the poem kind of plummets . . . Though I am glad to see you writing poetry again! I only have a few comment: ...

aieee... You kill me with this, Dear Brad. I won't argue over the 'help' thing... ech. Ariel is a major b-, and Jon makes me want to cry!! *gasp* It's ...

I'm not going to mention anything Pushca said; she was amazing for saying it. the silent wind elegantly whispers as it blew the irony from the field. . . . ...

Fand ate my thoughts in pointing out the "it is..." pattern, and how annoying it got. I think this poem thrives off of rhyming/rhythm rather than, like one expects from ...

What were you trying to write about? Because, perhaps I didn't understand the poem, but it started and I thought: Oh, this is a poem about writing a poem, in ...

It was OK. Agreed, sometimes the forced rhyming made the actually lines kind of senseless. Certainly, add some punctuation: Poetry & Punctuation . Also, the poem worked with imagery, but ...

Look who actually rolled around to something of yours =) he shot the kid grin. the kid a grin Drugged out as they were they reminded him so much of ...

Wow. That really is heart breaking...Poor young kyle. Of course, I have so little knowledge of death, that I'm just kind of, "aww..." but I can't really feel with him. ...

First the line-by-lines: His eyes fell upon the sight of the ancient city of Lanoth was aflame. If you cut out the description here, the sentence says, "His eyes fell ...

"I don't know." She shook her head, not taking her eyes off him. "I've never been here before." "Yeah. Right." "Kyle." Very Juliet xD I wish you wouldn't have told ...

yay! This was rad. My only problem was the position of people in the scene where Ariel and Sarah Show up. Where is Kyle, exactly? I imagined him looking out ...

Awww it's Sarah... and I got it before it was really "Revealed" in this one. Was this the, "Oooh that's what that is." thing? At least Sarah is sweet with ...

I liked it, but the sentence structures, and line structures for that matter, really bothered me. They were jumpy, and didn't flow, and some of the sentences felt lumpy, kind ...

Oooo, this is fun. Haven't gone to the media yet, thought I'd post first. So we're getting more about CMP? And being led into Melnikov, it's wonderful. I liked this ...