Emerson

The idea is nice, but I have some problems with it. This came off real "grocery list" like. I am, I will, you have, we are this/that. There was no ...

It repeats to much, and has no punctuation. (Unless you count the one period at the very end.) Those are my biggest complaints. Since you yourself say you are new ...

I'm with Fand, and Snoink. Scrap it, rewrite it, and make sure you punctuate it. (This will help you: Poetry & Punctuation ) The rhyme scheme was way too simple, ...

Colly covered some good topics. Not to contradict her but simply give another opinion... Shaking hands that no longer work, Yes, at first this line caught me off guard. You ...

This poem was OK, but I couldn't really relate to it. Try better word choice, and adding some imagery would really help it. Paint us a picture, and give us ...

This had no punctuation, but the biggest problem was that the grammar is just not there. I think kitty covered most of this. This poem needs some help. First person ...

The repetition was annoying. You gave us a poem, but not much to it. I can't entirely grasp what is even going on in it.. But that might just be ...

[s]Who wants to save a life? I do.[/s] Amongst dirty roads and dusty atmosphere, a woman exhales, inhales, deeper, slower, her blood trails across her legs, the river runs dry. ...

Punctuate. Please. Poetry & Punctuation This poem was really stuck in its self. Pull it out of its self, and rewrite it. In other words: make us feel something, pay ...

It was...curious. You should capitalize looks quiet without it. (And does that make sense?) This was a captured moment of a very brief and brisk thing. The imagery was minimal ...

I liked this--it was subtle, and had a beauty to it. The repetition of the grandfather clock was somewhat unneeded, IMO. You need to punctuate it more (that is my ...

Seeing that Fand has already been here... I'll have to come up with something good to say. This poem was kind of...cliché? Yes. The story is a drab one, haven't ...

Wow. I'm going to say [and you'll be amazed with this] I actually understood something you wrote! ^_^ I really liked this, but I felt it was missing something. And ...

I second everything that Fräulein WD said. I can't really say more, other than tell you how you can fix it. That's always helpful, ja? So, you have this emotional ...

Sorry this took me so long to get to, I slightly forgot >_< We have only minutes till class starts Till isn't the word, you mean until, or 'til. I ...