Ellyphant

So, I have nothing to point out other than what has already been...I love it!!! Can't wait for it to be finished! And you must make it longer! ♥Elly :elephant:

I love the idea of this poem! Very creative :D Critique: So, the first thing that caught my eye was the syllable count. It is a tad off, and in ...

First, I have a question. Why is this poem titled "Dissappear into Seas and Stones"? I honestly think that it should be titled "Hopeless". Second. The seperating of the word ...

In a lonely (Comma inserted here) room she cries (Here there should be a comma, and then the 'W' should be lowercased) Waiting patiently for the pain to ease, eagerly ...

Ooh! I want to read part two! I like where this is going. *praises* Thank you so much for making this a non-romance vampire story! I am so freaking tired ...

BWAHA! stomach hurts from laughing so hard. Sorry, but I just can't give a proper review because that was just too funny! My Grandaddy's sitting on the computer behind me ...

Usually I would recomend capitalization, but yours fit together. Usually I would comment on your punctuation, but yours I can't. This poem was heavily armored and I can't seem to ...

First Impression Awe. That's cute! Review -I would like to point out (before the mod.s do) that you only have one review when the ratio is 2-3 reviews per post. ...

Oh no! I should probably tell you before a Mod. does...you need at least 2-3 reviews to post one piece of work. This keeps everything even and balanced. Kind of ...

Ugh. Edwards annoying. Bella's got mental issues. Jacob's a wannabe indian stalker. Jaspers a friggin ghost. Alice is nothing more than a witch. And all of those other characters are ...

The two main problems that I had with this poem is...*ahem*...Capitalization! Capitalization! Capitalization! Everytime That you start a new line Inside a Poem's heart, (which are stanza's if you didn

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You have quite a few problems with this play. You have spelling errors, grammar errors, and it's quite confusing. One of my main problems that I have with this writing ...

I liked this. There were a few parts that didn't flow nicely, but the overall message was developed greatly. My favorite stanza was probably... You whisper in my ear And ...

This is awesome. You really did a great job to be made on the spot. But I wouldn't recommend this to be a song. An actual Lyric has Verses, a ...