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Hi there, La! Welcome to YWS. I read through this poem twice, and I thought it was pretty good. Your subject matter was original, and is definitely one of my ...

Hi Demi! Wow. These are really good. I read through about the first half and skimmed the rest, and I am amazed at the talent in these haiku. My favorite ...

Hi Hippie! A haiku, eh? I like haiku; they are short, sweet and when done well, excellent story tellers. How did yours fare? I thought it was okay. It tackled ...

Hi Timmy! I just had a few comments. ^^ She sat there with her legs dangling over the edge You might want to mention the legs belong to her and ...

Are you a first time poet? If you aren't, I'm surprised. You make a lot of amateur mistakes; capitalizing very line, and having a comma at the end of every ...

Hey, I like this. It's a charming poem, and I like how you took a a cliched subject matter for a poem (a lot of people write about nature and ...

Hiya, this was an interesting piece, but it could use some work. BenFranks already got my comment about this being one sided. However, there were a few other things I ...

This was an excellent poem. I disagree with Matt Bellamy-the short length of the poem compliments it. You don't have a lot of information that you need to convey to ...

Hi. This is a nice piece with a heartfelt message, but sadly it suffers from punctuation errors which detract from the poem. You use commas to end sentences when you ...

Hi there! I really liked this. As your title points out, this is short and sweet, which is one of my favorite types of poetry. Your flow and word choice ...

Hi there! This was a neat poem. I thought the line breaks were interesting, and they help enforce your decrepit subject matter. As Sionmara said, this was twisted. As much ...

Hi Firearris! This was certainly much better then The Cricket , which I think was the last poem I'd reviewed of yours up until now. What do I like about ...

Hi! These weren't that bad. They could use some work, but hey, you were in sixth grade. The second through fourth haiku were really good, and I just have a ...

Hi! This was a pretty good poem, and your words seem to describe my feelings for this poem; It was definitely very sweet. First things first; your poem could definitely ...

Hi there. This was interesting poem; I enjoyed the concept and the fresh ideas, and the repetition of "This shot" made it seem all the more spooky. However, this poem ...