Dreami

Personally, I wouldn't use caps. They're distracting. You could also add a comma in here: If you are reading this, then you know I am dead. You could probably change ...

There is some very interesting imagery here. I'd like it to have less vagueness, even though it is supposed to be like this. I think if you use more interesting ...

Well, the 'pls,pls!' was distracting at the beginning, but on to a review. The land flurished, and the people with it. If ever [perhaps whenever?] something rose to threaten the ...

“Wah!” said Nasaru. Don't use "Wah!" It sounds immature and childish. Change 'said' to something more exciting and change what he says. Maybe 'moaned' or 'whined' or... you get the ...

*mental anguish* Are story starts with the Crinoline family. Our story starts [...] They are a family of eight and they had a REALLY BIG secret that they were hiding ...

A lot of people think that snow shoveling is simple and easy. Well, it's not always as easy as people tend to think, but it can be if you know ...

Oh yes, I totally agree with what you said Phoebe. In fact, I felt a little nauseous when I read the title, and it vaguely reminded me of a certain ...

I'm running through a forest that you just set on fire. Its flames lick at my feet and my head starts to ring. It burns as if the sun had ...

Nathaniel got on my nerves, he was a whiny little idiot for the first two, but I really felt bad for him in the third one. I think I started ...

Eragon and Arya and the like can just die for all I care. In fact, I may have to have a party when Christopher Paolini dies. I'm going through the ...

1. Eragon or Harry (as heroes)? Harry... I don't like him but he's flawed and human. Eragon is like... perfect. 2. Galbatorix or Lord Voldemort (as villains)? Lord Voldemort could ...

ahh... I also could go on for ages concerning the Star Wars/Lord of the Rings similarities that annoy me so much. So now my friends just joke about it, and ...

Overall, very pretty. You move nicely from subject to subject. The inky darkness gives way and the earth's vision is restored once again. Personally. I think it would sound better ...

It is interesting, I agree with that, and the rhyming could be better. Personally, I hate all rhyming, it just constricts the poem, but here that wasn't the problem. Here ...

This idea is good, but theres some improvements that need to be made.I'll start at the top. First, the "to" you want to use is "too", signifying overdone, or also. ...