Dhendon

Well, well, well. Now we are truly getting into the characters even more. First off, I am pretty sure I about fell in love with Carrie after her little speech ...

Again, not one chapter ceases to amaze me. It has been a while since I have been around for a review of your chapters, and I have missed it. This ...

Okay, let me begin by saying how magnificent I felt this piece was. Of course, as with every piece of literature, typos will come and eventually they will be fixed ...

Wow. That was a very powerful monologue, and it definitely evoked a lot of emotion. Point number one: you got emotion. That is a very powerful thing to control, and ...

Let's begin with my immediate thoughts about the story. I was intrigued by the title, so I decided to take a look. At first, I thought the story was going ...

Wow. Let me start with the fact that this was very interesting. It definitely had an intriguing aspect to it, so that's very good. I like that you had a ...

Okay, let me start by saying this was wonderful, in my opinion. I found this very interesting, and I would certainly read more of your work. Now, I saw three ...

Oh wow! Again, another wonderful chapter to this story. As with all the previous chapters, I absolutely adore this storyline and the characters. There are a few typos, but that's ...

Let me start by saying that was the most amusing, hilarious thing I have ever read! I absolutely love this. I felt like this would be me in a store. ...

Let me start off by saying, this is a very, very interesting concept. So, you have gotten point number one right by getting my attention, keeping it, and making me ...

Well, let me start by saying that the idea of the story is intriguing and it made me want to keep reading. It definitely had an emotional appeal, and that's ...

First off, I like the story and the idea in general. This seems like a very interesting start to a very good story. It is an idea that has been ...

Wow, this was very interesting to read. First off, the title is what made me click and decide to read anyway. Then, the topic of the entire thing is what ...

Another wonderful chapter of this excellent story. Again, I loved it. My only problem was when the point of view switched from Jay and Carrie to Steven in the middle, ...

It is not a bad concept, and actually, I rather enjoyed the general story line. A lot of the grammatical errors threw me off for a second which kind of ...