Demeter

So, here I am, then :) Good job! I loved, loved the first line, it's the best thing about this poem, I think. It's so beautiful. Although I suggest you'd ...

I liked the idea, using cliches on purpose is great, otherwise not. :) and think of you. (who's that?) --> this line made me wonder whether you'd meant "thinking" insted ...

I liked the rhyming, though some lines were too long and thus the rhyming didn't sound that good. Now you're to late --> I think you meant "too" late grownw ...

Beautiful poem, once again. And once again, hard to review. I just don't know why that is. But nevertheless, I'm going to try. :) In my opinion, the second stanza ...

Hmm, I liked this. But I would've liked it more if it were a bit longer :) "Love is harsh Love is kind Love is bound to make you blind" ...

It's a good thing that you critique your own work! :) Then you maybe understand better what the others are talking about. To the poem. "so this I want to ...

Very nice subject, and by editing this just a little bit you could have a great poem! I found one confusing part in the third stanza; "Your warmth makes me ...

What's with the colours? I think you're kind of cunning - would people feel so good about this poem if it didn't have colours? I found it hard to focus ...

A capital letter starts the sentence, right? :) And commas would be nice, too. And the word people has an "e" and an "o" in it. And you mustn't forget ...

Oh wow. Really. So beautiful. I'm not bothered with the repetition, in fact I like to do it myself, too. But I must say I had to laugh at Vernon's ...

You sure have a lot of feelings of this kind in your poems. The problem is, it makes them very much similar to each other. But I know poetry is ...

Hmm... Where's the flow? Okay, the lack of the flow didn't really bother me too much. I just had to say it. To me, the word "basically" sounded somewhat sharp ...

Yep, the structure was a bit confusing but since you admit this yourself, I wouldn't be so bothered about it. Hmm... What else could I say? Well, it was long. ...

To me, it was a bit too telling. Usually, that doesn't bother me, but now I got somehow uncomfortable. Could have been because of the subject, of course. But I ...

"Watching as you trip And tumble along your trip." While reading this, I couldn't help a little smile because of the "rhyme". I don't know what it was supposed to ...