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Hi ishitadutt! Wow, I really enjoyed this story. It was one of those pieces, that you disappear into another place, completely seperate, on your own, following a story. I lost ...

Hi Myjaspercat, Oooooh this piece is so intriguing! I have just read His Game, which I found equally haunting but enticing all at once. One thing, "Slightly above his waist"? ...

Hi Delirium, Wow, this is amazing! I absolutely loved the concept of this piece. And regarding Pretzelsing's comment, I completely agree. I think everyone, whatever age, wherever you're from, everyone

Hello TealElephant, Spelling!: "CEASED to exist, not sized or siezed! That kind of took away from the work for me. and "themselves" not them self. The imagery in this piece ...

I prefer the dialogue in this piece towards its following section, although it gets a bit more casual again towards the end. Just a few changes, instead of uneasiness "quiver ...

I liked it, I'd try to change the ending though. The entire piece built up to that one answer, and I felt it didn't have enough weight to it. I ...

Hello Gravity, Wow. Please, please, please continue with this story! In such a short piece, you have already captured my attention so completely. As a reader, this prologue raises so ...

Dear CatInTheShower, As always, I am riddled with envy while reading you're work, I think this is beautiful, as is all your work. I liked to see the change to ...

Hi tanvi, This is such a beautiful piece! I loved your descriptive imagery, it really transports the reader to a beautiful sleepy sunrise. "universe full of chaos and disarray" is ...

Hello nishthabawa2896, I really like this piece, I think it works especially well because it applies to everyone, and a more diverse audience is always refreshing for both the writer ...

I liked this, especially the last 5 lines. I usually don't like rhyming in poems, I think most of the time it makes them seem more childish. Having said that, ...

AndrewRayne, this is such a beautiful poem. My hope for the human race's ability to love and to express that love is restored in this piece alone! I found myself ...

I thought this was a touching story, the dialogue at the start did slow it down slightly for the beginning, but the ending more than makes up for it! I ...