Deathcurrent

You're right when you say that it's funny! I totally agree with this poem and my favorite part is: The mistake once done , gone like the wind , Act ...

This fits well with everyone at some point, but this fits me right now. My favorite part is: I walk down the dark grey path, Waiting for the rain to ...

Hey Missunderstood ! This is really good, and since I've seen Zombieland, this caught my attention instantly. This part: ‘Hunter! Help! Don’t let the monsters get me!’ five year old ...

Wow! I truly did forget about YU-Gi-Oh. Thanks for bringing him back from MY forgotten memory. I think that my favorite part in this dialogue is: Joey:Oy -.-' Honda:Awwww Joey:I ...

Well done! I ask myself that question when I've just read something really philosophical. I truly like: Look at your reflection, what do you see? Is it what they tell ...

Wow, I really loved it! I'm in shock at how much emotion I pulled from the first line. Though in this stanza: Cracked upon the blinding darkness light pierced and ...

Wow. That really drew me in and didn't let me go. I think I might just cry if you don't put chapter one up. I really like how you do ...

Nice work Dragonett. This work is coming along nicely. The only thing that bugged me was this part: All she ever did was tie her hair back into two braids ...

Hey there! I really enjoyed your first chapter. Though I have some suggestions that will hopefully help. In this piece, you've used a lot of short sentences. This paragraph in ...

I agree with Butterfly18, you need to make it a smidgen more unique. How you'd do this I don't know, but I'm positive that you'll be able to do it. ...

"Yes.” I replied honestly. “I felt a disturbance in the energy around us, didn’t you?” “That is exactly what I felt. I think a magical creature just died violently over ...

Hello! Of course I'll help re-word it, that's what we're here for. Though I can't speak for everyone else on YWS. Breathing hard, Jordin lowered her aching arms and jogged ...

I'll be congratulating you as well, but I think you ended a little abruptly. You could definitely draw this out, even if it's suppose to be short. Ending a story ...

Wow! Ignore everything about this review for a minute or two. I just want to say how... sweet that was. I don't think sweet can describe your poem in one ...

So simple and beautiful. My favorite part is: People that I thought could see The glimmer of hope inside of me Were only using me, I fear, As a pastime, ...