Published November 28, 2011
Friends have become bitches, very lame funny , and serious!!
Friends act like bitches ,
I try to ditch them ,
but they keep coming like a bad itch .
The mistake once done , gone like the wind ,
Act like the crime done is a pirates leg
and hang on the hook ,
try hard to shake but are like leeches on peaches
Want to leave everything behind ,
want to go like the wind ,
just my presence there , but not me
One question remains in my mind
Who rattled their cages
Friends act like bitches ,
I try to ditch them .
to stop acting dead I sing "Bitches love me"
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Hahahahahahahahahaha, this was hilarious!! - Especially the part about the bad itch.
Maybe this was meant to be funny and not "perfect" - meaning that maybe you've focused on the fun and not the rhymes and the rhythm, because this poem lack some of that.
But it was a funny poem, so if that was your intention you succeeded!
You're right when you say that it's funny! I totally agree with this poem and my favorite part is:
The was very clever.
Excellent poem,
Deathcurrent