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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Forever Suffocated

    It was a really good poem. I liked it. My only complaint is punctuation. My favorite line would be "I didn't know the you who diedI knew the you before" ...

    Fri Oct 22, 2010 3:33 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Eye Of The Beholder

    Hey there! :D This is a great poem. :) I like it a lot. I have some suggestions though. These are my opinions though. You can do with them how ...

    Tue Oct 19, 2010 12:18 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Lover's Cry

    Hi there :) I'm just going to tell you what I think. It's just my opinion. You're the writer so you know how it's supposed to sound. This is how ...

    Tue Oct 19, 2010 12:06 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The lonely ones <3

    This was an amazing poem. I loved it. Just a couple of things: The lonely ones In a war-filled world might add a comma. they stand alone. Their shallow hearts ...

    Mon Oct 18, 2010 10:56 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Water Nymph

    First of all. I really liked this poem. It had good flow and a very nice rhythm. Just a couple things; but these are my opinions. You're the one who ...

    Mon Oct 18, 2010 1:38 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I've Fallen For You

    This poem was really good. I like the rhythm and the lyrics. There was a sense of hope at the end at least from my interpretation. You did a good ...

    Sun Oct 17, 2010 4:21 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Beautiful Inside, Ugly Outside

    That was amazing! I understand the feelings behind it, well at least the feelings I feel when I read it. You are an amazing writer. :) I would've liked to ...

    Sun Oct 17, 2010 2:46 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Love is Lillies

    I loved this so much :) It was amazing :) You did an awesome job. Youre really good. Keep writing :) ~Dannielle~

    Sun Oct 17, 2010 2:29 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Caged Bird

    Amazing poem! I know the feeling and I'm in the same area sorta, so I know how you're feeling. You did a good job of conveying the message. You're a ...

    Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:13 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I wanted you more.

    This was a good poem. I understand the emotions behind it completely. I'm sorry if this happened to you. It does hurt. You are a good writer and you seem ...

    Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:08 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Who are you?

    That was really good, a very unique topic which makes it stand out all the more. The title ties in your line "The girl weeps: Be quiet! What? Oh.I apologize ...

    Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:03 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Life In the Eyes Of a Godless Man

    That was a really good poem. I normally don't care for really short poems but I really liked this. It short, sweet, and to the point. You did a great ...

    Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:56 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Heaven Shunned

    I agree with kikialicia31. When you write from the heart you can never go wrong. You might be writing from the heart and we just don't know. I couldn't feel ...

    Sun Oct 10, 2010 1:44 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: How Could You?

    This was really good. I liked it. I'm sorry that this happened to you. You could feel the sadness. You're an amazing writer and any one can tell that from ...

    Sun Oct 10, 2010 1:34 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The pain I give myself

    It was a really good poem. I could feel the pain as if it was happening to me. I hope you feel better, life will always get better. You're an ...

    Sun Oct 10, 2010 1:24 am


I like to create sympathy for my characters, then set the monsters loose.
— Stephen King