Crysi

Firstly, I'd like to point out that if you need to include explanations, you haven't done your job as a writer. Secondly... Your little lessons are somewhat trite. I've heard ...

I'm afraid I wasn't impressed with the poem. I'm not a fan of rhyming poems, because you have to do it really well in order to pull it off, and ...

No more angular momentum!!! *laughs* I really liked this. I like the "Shhh..." at the beginning. I hear it in a calming whisper, perhaps set to the background of ocean ...

I love this! I really want to hear the piece it's modeled after, but until then, I'll just evaluate it based on the poem itself. I love the repetition of ...

That's adorable! I especially love the ending. The names are fairly ridiculous, but so is the story, so I suppose it can be forgiven. Of course, "Meg" doesn't really fit ...

I thought it was pretty good... I just have a few nitpicks. :) At the very beginning, Mary seems uncertain and not entirely awake. After the first paragraph, though, she ...

Wow. I can't tell you how many times I read this -- I even googled it to make sure you hadn't ripped off Shakespeare! Shakespearian sonnets are very difficult to ...

...Ew! You are one twisted writer, Jigs. *laughs* I mean, this was pretty fantastic, but... I cannot believe you go the places you do with these stories. One comment - ...

Wow. Just... wow. I cannot tell you how much I love this poem! I really like how you stick with two-line stanzas until the end, and the last line begins ...

I really like it. The only thing I'd suggest is that you work on line breaks. Just play with them a little more. And play with capitalization - I think ...

Please use spell check, rodent. ;) I'm in love with this trilogy! I've read the first book, and I'm halfway through the second, although I haven't had time to read ...

Hey, now, that's no way to go about it! Come on, chin up! I'll review it! You just have to have patience, dear one. :) This was an interesting chapter... ...

If this is the flashback you were referring to after you posted Chapter 1, I'd like to congratulate you on fitting this in very nicely. Your chapters are short, so ...

I liked it, although you stole a line from Pirates. ;) I was sort of confused on the Raven's form, however... I know she's half-elven, and perhaps you described her ...

*laughs* This just completely made my day. Honestly. It's very cute, you have a nice rhyme scheme going on, and the best part: you know how to keep rhythm! The ...