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Hey, I enjoyed reading this story it has a great plot and honestly, I'm surprised this is just writing practice. Please keep in mind I really am more of a ...

Hey, This is a really touching poem. I used to fight with one of my so called friends constantly and always ended up in tears. Now we don't talk anymore ...

Hey, All I want to do is be happy about this poem because it's for YWS, but alas this is a review so that is what I must do, review. ...

Hey, This is a inspiring poem. I can't find any punctuation errors so yay you! I feel the need to inform you however that not every line needs to start ...

Hey, Right off the bat SQUEE SUPERNATURAL! I have been waiting for a supernatural poem for way to long. Now that I think about it I don't see why I ...

Hey, Okay, wow this is a really short poem. Lets see how long I can make this review. I've noticed you kinda blew off capitalization. I just talked to it ...

Hey, This is a very nicely written poem. It's kinda beautiful in fact. I love the format you chose to use I think it make the whole think seem a ...

Hey, I found a few errors so I would like to start with those. "everyone seems to forgot him" It should be forget. "his world has turn up site down" ...

Hey, This story is really great. I read it through several times and the only spelling error I found was "Hedgewitches" the two words should be separate. Other then that ...

Hey, So this is awkward... I was going to start out with the few spelling errors I caught but CreativelyWritten has already mentioned them. Woe is me. Anyway, at first ...

Hey, This is a enjoyable story so far. I love your use of punctuation and the fact that you acknowledged the lack of capitalization in the Author's note. The feeling ...

Hey, Right off the bat I notice a lack of capitalization at the start of every paragraph. As well as I you used it well but its lowercase constantly. In ...

Hey, I'm not sure I would call this a short story with a few tweaks it would make a great poem however. My biggest problem right now is the lack ...

Hey, This is a great poem. Being a suicidal and depressed teen I can really relate to this. I think your use of punctuation, vocabulary, and capitalization, were wonderful and ...

Hey, Well I guess you were right. The title does explain it all :) I like your use of punctuation and capitalization through out the poem. You also used great ...