Chevy

"I bid Remembrance a rough farewell" What a beautiful line. We could have scavenged for the truths Seemed kind of out of place and kind of took the poem into ...

Well, for the starters, you seemed really lonely, but it wasn't the depressing "I'm dying here" lonely. Not sure who you were talking to...well, I might have an idea but ...

I liked the image of 'Abercrombie Girls' and you did a good job portraying them up until this point: "Because they always follow the crowd And never think there own ...

Kind of choppy in some places, and a little lame but I still liked it. Let it rip through disease like a knife in tender flesh: morphine, radiation, burn it ...

I bet Jake is you. And as always, that distracts me...I can't help but me perceptive. I've never heard of Pre Chapters and Post Chapters. I would have to say, ...

Aww this was so cute! I officially love poems about trolls :nods: But on a serious note, the rhythym was a bit off but the concept was interesting...I thought it ...

I like the concept but I don't really see how this is Lyric, probably more Dramatic or Other but it's okay I guess. It was a bit lengthy and redundant; ...

Wow, very nicely written. I liked the metaphors and the imagery...you put it together very nicely. The concept was also very good, as Rach said. Chevy's Critiquing Scale far left ...

Well, I'm not much of a poet myself but I would suggest ditching the punctuation except for the quotations. But honestly, I doesn't need that much work...it's pretty good actually. ...

I do not know which of us has written this page. SO THAT WAS APART OF IT!? See Brad, you did not tell me this when you showed it to ...

A bit lengthy...sometimes length can be good but it can get boring. I liked the subject and this would fit very well in a story of some sort. Chevy's Critiquing ...

TBR: Did you mean cease? lol *Sigh* Emo the Brad. I mean, Brad the Emo. No, not really you haven't got there--yet :P lol. But honestly, I loved it. It ...

Ok, I'm not a moderator over the Lyric Poetry section but it hadn't been done yet sooo I hope the mods over that section won't mind. Anyway, very nice song...rather ...

The first two stanzas were pretty predictable. Those are the kind of lines that belong in one of those pop songs. The third stanza reminded me of Howie Day, and ...

I commented on this already via AIM but I guess I could do it again. This was perhaps the best 9/11 poem, or commentary as you called it that I've ...