When the World Spins Out of Control
When the world spins out of control,
It's usually best to consult a troll.
For he tends to give the best advice
Unless you happen to have lice
In which case you had better
find a way to write a letter.
For trolls do not tend to be kind
When you threaten them with your mind
Or the fleas on your head
Which had better be dead
Or he'll throw you straight out,
Perhaps even toss you about,
Until it is you that is spinning.
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I have yet to finish it... look out for PART TWO!!!! I do need to work on the rhythm though... ah well. I'll change it soon enough.
hehheh...very nice Forest. I especially like how all your rhyme worked.
hehheh...Trolls. I wonder what their advice would be?
EL
I thought at first this was a boring nonsensical poem, but on rereading it found that there was sense in the poem. I sure don't know why trolls hate lice or fleas so much; but how's a troll supposed to give advice, and the best advice at that!
I've seen that trolls can't even talk properly!! 
Hehe! Wonderful! I'm diggin' the troll. Nice rhyming. And I love the wittisicm. Good job!
Aww this was so cute! I officially love poems about trolls :nods:
But on a serious note, the rhythym was a bit off but the concept was interesting...I thought it was going to be serious until I read the second line and I was like "Whoa--thought wrong..." But yeah, very creative and I loved the last line.