The Garden Of Life
Greed is like a thistle,
Its flowers hold much beauty,
As they stand on thorny stems.
Hate is like a nettle,
You cannot clasp it in your hands,
Without feeling its sting.
And a smileis like a primrose,
Its delicate petals fragile in a garden,
Overrun with weeds.
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You make me cry
Very creative, and somewhat real because it refers to the nature
Well, I was wandering how you and other poets come up imagining things so naturally?
P.S. I was wandering what "smileis" was. Is it a typo?
Wow, very nicely written. I liked the metaphors and the imagery...you put it together very nicely. The concept was also very good, as Rach said.
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Very pretty, and good concept. I dont really see much wrong with it, except for the typo in the last stanza. Yup, good work.