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Hi, dearie. Please edit your post and put For Losing You in the subject title, kay? =)

I hope this fits into this section. I'm so new to this site! Anyways, I hope u like it!!





"For Losing You"



By Me





I woke up today

I sat there and prayed,

for the moon to fall and sun to shine again

After all that one could take,

no wonder this heartbreak

Slowly ate away at me inside



Oh, I don't see how I still live

And I cant find my mind

For losing you





My soul left my body

For losing you

My heart slowly shattered

For losing you

Now I scream and I shout

I'm always filled with doubt

And my world keeps on spinning

For losing you







At first I thought we could have a#FF0000 "> lot

Never suspecting our world to tumble

But then came those words and,

we were through

I never meant that much to you





My soul left my body

For losing you

My heart slowly shattered

For losing you

Now I scream and I shout

I'm always filled with doubt

And my world keeps on spinning

For losing you





Now that all that's through, I Realized I don't need you

I know I don't need to life my life with the same damned thing

But thinking back at the times we shared, #FF0000 ">I know now that there was something there

And now I truly hate

I hate myself for lo#FF0000 ">osing you





My soul left my body

For losing you

My heart slowly shattered

For losing you

Now I scream and I shout

I'm always filled with doubt

And my world keeps on spinning

For losing you

I know I don't need to #BF00BF ">life my life with the same damned thing

I love these lyrics, very good and beautiful rhythm. I could just hear the song forming in my head. that's mostly because I want to be a songwriter.

It was okay, I didn't care much for the parts in which you'd say "For losing you" it just didn't seem proper to use "for" when you could have used "from". Also the word "a lot" is two separate words. You had it spelled as "allot" which is incorrect.

I really like these lyrics and I think that they can be improved a little bit, but only a little because I believe in keeping the original lyrics. I love that. Are you interested in songwriting?

Ok, I'm not a moderator over the Lyric Poetry section but it hadn't been done yet sooo I hope the mods over that section won't mind.

Anyway, very nice song...rather Ashlee Simpson/Carrie Underwood/Kelly Clarkson like. And by your icon I'm pretty sure you wouldn't mind that.

I hope this fits into this section.