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Hm, I'm trying to say this as tactfully as I can, but I have figured out your style and it's nothing like what I like, so therefore, that's why I'm ...

What is your decision just tell me for the razor cuts strait to my core That sounded terribly rushed, perhaps with the use of commas it won't be as bad. ...

Angst, angst, piss, bitch, moan, Sounds like a line in someone wannabe horror movie that comes on Saturday night on cable somewhere. But seriously. That was bad. Sorry to say...but, ...

Well, I personally don't like acrostic because they're so restricting, however, you did very well with creating a very free and flowing poem. I really like it. However, when writing ...

Well, the poem, in it's entirety, the way it was written--I didn't particulary care for. (Sorry, I'm in a real bad mood today) But the concept, the message you were ...

Well, I understand where you were going, and I can relate, but the poem itself just didn't stick to me. I mean, I read it and almost immediately I forgot ...

Sunset settling on the clouds, This was written rather beautifully, but didn't seem to be the beginning of a poem. You should probably add another line or two above it. ...

Well, first of all, I can't see how this could possibly have anything to do with rockstars having no hearts...second of all, I don't really see how this could possibly ...

I felt like this poem didn't really flow--and it was constantly going on to new subjects and not necessarily sticking with one thing. If I just give it time Time ...

i try to though i Was a bit awkward, and probably should be condensed to one line or taken out completely. However, I loved your concept, but the poem just ...

Hm, I had to read this twice to really understand what this poem meant. I like what I read, however, when this is no good sign, where the reader has ...

i thought it sounded a bit juvenile and think maybe it deserves a bit more consideration and depth. I agree with convintojm. There wasn't really much depth here. Also, you ...

Well, I'm not really one for poems that rhyme, simply because in serious poems, they can really take away from the poem itself. However, even though I didn't particulary care ...

an enigma waiting to be unleashed enclosed in a stone prison with just a small hole for air I loved this part the most. However two small problems. Well, one ...

Do you remember when we used to play limbs intertwined one person two heads :Laughs: That could have been one whole line! Anyway, on a serious note, the lines were ...