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Re: Not Everything Is Within the Mind
I like how the title of this poem is important and becomes almost like the opening line, you read the title then the poem and it ends with "it's within ...
Aug 19, 2013 -
Re: I am a lighthouse, but I am waiting for someone to call me home.
Simply put this is so sweet. I makes me feel warm and comfortable when I read this. I only have a few suggestions if you choose to change your poem ...
Aug 19, 2013 -
Re: Don't Leave
First off, I'm gonna have to say I disagree with Charley. This definitely is a poem in my eyes and I'm glad you posted it here. Like I said below ...
Aug 19, 2013 -
Re: Stay <3
I agree with Ariana here, I like the ending a lot. It does seem a little generic. It i can tell it was heartfelt and meaningful for you. I liked ...
Aug 19, 2013 -
Re: things we shouldn't say (VII)
The last two stanzas here are my favorite. I find the first three a bit confusing, I think the whole poem could benefit from some better structure or punctuation or ...
Aug 19, 2013 -
Re: Peaceful Imaginings
I like this poem. Its simple and sweet, short and to the point. I will say that it is a bit too cliche for my taste but like I said ...
Aug 18, 2013 -
Re: Waves of You
"The little green button shows you're online and I wonder what you're thinking. Do you ever still think of me? Or am I just another boat drifting by along your ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: Cigarette Smoke
Love this. Its sweet and simple yet shows emotion. I relate, but i seem to be on the opposite end of you, I'm the one smoking. Feeling bad for keeping ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: for her
I love the way you write. This is beautiful and so well thought out. My favorite lines: "doesn’t she know she deserves better then a hook in her lip and ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: The Captain's Prediction
This is lovely. I like how you started it with talking about the captain and ended it with that as well. I think it may get a little confusing in ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: The Adolescent Wind
I really enjoyed reading this. It isn't like most of the poetry that I read, and I find it suits my taste well. The way it flows and gives you ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: Writer of Things
I like the way this poem is going and the idea that you are portraying. I do have some tips and suggestions to help make it perhaps more clear and ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: Beyond Looks
I know a boy like this, and I write about him often. I hate that I understand the last line here "In his arms you will find true paradise" It ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: for my darling
This is beautiful. I can't think of much else to say other than i really enjoyed this lovely poem. It makes me feel sad and happy at the same time. ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: The Thing That I Love
Holy shit I love this! It flows so well and can be so many different things depending on how you take it. Punctuation is on point and definitely adds to ...
Aug 16, 2013
