I am a lighthouse, but I am waiting for someone to call me home.

This is so sweet and beautiful.
In all your poems, the imagery is fascinating.

I liked the repetition of "I am a lighthouse".
The last stanza is especially beautiful, in my opinion, as it further describes metaphor of the narrator as a lighthouse.

The break between "sailed" and "in" at the start of the poem seems a little bit disjointed, if I had to give a suggestion it would be to try and reword that.
The flow is great in the rest of the poem though, and I like the way the second stanza is structured.

I wish I could write half as well as you, you're amazing at writing metaphors and including imagery. Thanks for writing this, it was a good read

Hello I am definitely not an expert on the art of poetry, but this, in my opinion, was a great poem. It flows well and I haven't read it aloud, but it probably sounds amazing when you do.
Your use of figurative language really brings your words to life, however cliche that may sound it's still true.
The one suggestion I have is that you choose another word for "ocean-saturated". Although I like your diction there, especially the word "saturated", I think it slightly disrupts the flow due to its length. That's just me though and either way this is a very well written poem.

Hello there, Vitamere! I'm Satyne and I'll be reviewing this amazing piece of work.

This analogy really works for me. You display the sense of longing and loneliness quite well, and in a whole, this poem revolves in a steady circle that ties together neatly and nicely. Bonus! I loved how you conveyed the narrator's point of view, as well.

However there were some grammatical bugs that didn't suit my fancy. There were some random capitals thrown in there, and I myself got thrown off track just a little bit. Alas if you were to fix them, I'd applaud you!

Overall this was a wonderful poem with a wonderful story behind it. Keep writing!

Um, OK, can you stop breaking my heart? Thanks.

But seriously. I'm not going to review this. I'm going to rave on about this for a little while because I completely relate and I love this. It's a beautiful metaphor. I SAW the imagery, I felt the significance behind the imagery, it was well-written, great flow, perfect length, I just-

*dramatic stand and slow clap*

Simply put this is so sweet. I makes me feel warm and comfortable when I read this. I only have a few suggestions if you choose to change your poem a bit.

"where few ships have sailed
in to find guidance."

I find the break between saild and in really offputting, making a dead stop in the flow, it really hit me the wrong way so early on in the poem. I would suggest trying to rearrgae this somehow.


"an empty bottle
with love letters drenched
in tears and seawater
(I couldn’t tell the difference)"

This is my favorite line, really love "I couldnt tell the difference"!!!

"and lay your head back
and let out a sigh that won’t"

Here I would just suggest taking out the word and in both lines, just seems a bit uneccsary.

Overall very nice!! I enjoyed this poem!1

-Laci<3

So! I really like this. It's a nice analogy and you carry it through to the end well. However, there are some inconsistencies in the grammar that are pretty distracting. I'd suggest picking a way to use capital letters and stick with it. Adding some punctuation in towards the front could also really help straighten out the flow, as it was a bit jarring in some parts.

There are some adjectives that don't quite match up to the quality of your other poem, which is featured right now. Rather, the imagery wasn't quite on par. You have some fantastic descriptions and then some rather cliche ones. If you go through, I think if you inspect the imagery a bit more, you can write a much stronger piece altogether by fixing those.

Last thing I really have to say about this piece (there isn't a whole lot, because it's pretty well written): you tend to write with a very dramatic voice. In some parts, there are natural pauses and structuring that kind of makes it overly dramatic, at least in my opinion. Drama is great in writing, obviously, but it must be natural -- it needs to be because we, the readers, need to feel just as much emotional investment as the writer wants us to so that we feel tension about the same things we do. You convey a desperation towards the beginning that works quite well (maybe with some punctuation at least to move it a bit smoother), but towards the end you adopt a kind of bleak tone in parts that don't quite feel right. Just my opinion.

Anyway, great piece.

I loved it, and poetry always has to hit my the right way, you know? Yours did I liked when you listed the things that washed up that were unwanted, it made that part more effective to me. And the endings of anything are always VERY important. You nailed it with the last 5 lines, really letting the emotions sink in because most people know how that feels. It was a good analogy.

Lovely!

What a delicious sense of longing and loneliness.

Repeating "I am a lighthouse" really worked for me. It made me think of the lighthouse light spinning in a circle. Every time the poem returns to "I am a lighthouse", it is a though the light has travel in a full circle, and is pointing again right at me.

My favorite part of your poem is the ending

But my lamp is still burning
and my tower stands tall
and I will guide your journey,
even if it means pointing over there
when all I want is for you to stay here.

in the middle of nowhere