Chandni

hahaha :P Just like misty, I thought you were serious about that "genius" ah well, for humour it is just perfect :D

Wow :shock: Strong Strong message here, very good indeed ;) a few turns and tweaks would sure do this good or shall we say better :) They light candles , ...

aha, backgroundbobbie :) lemme read it over tomorrow, you know get the essence out of it ;) From what I understood till now, it sounds good ;) Greetings, Chandni

I liked the beginning...Really thought you were gonna bring sumthing outta it...but yeah its okay..I've written some weird poem with no meaning just happens...don't feel bad about it :wink:

aha :) very nice indeed as mentioned above it sounds great when read out loud but there's only one thing that bothered me :? Do you remember The fireflies that ...

Nice job here :thumb: really liked it :) here's my fav. part : And I find myself waiting, the clouds all passing by. For the wind to hearken to my ...

hmmm the title and topic aren't original which makes it harder for you to do something good out of it..you know something original..and you didn't I'm sorry :( This line ...

Very Nice, Your imaginary is very cool. I like your way of words lol they remind me of a friend of mine. Your Grammar is Fine ! No Complaints at ...

Intresting..a bit confusing the stanza's well there a bit off rythem I should say. "To betray is to love without choosing," you said as we stood alone at the twilight. ...

it was okay ;) I really liked the first stanza the second one is a bit off rythem.. the last stanza just seemed to bother me I think it is ...

It's verry looong :shock: and i'm too lazy to read it swwy :oops:

I liked it :) Nice job ! Your choice of words is verry nice. What I didn't like were your sudden cuts in between the lines verryy akward :? Couldn't ...

I liked your rhyming.. some lines did and didn't. I would never do that, but you handled it very well :wink: I didn't like the topic very well I probably ...

I like it, especially the topic just wonderfull. I personally don't like the structure here, in your first stanza the first lines break is kinda anoying. It looks like you ...

I can see your new.. This is the most stuff new members right trust me I started off the same way keep writing and you'll find yourself on this site... ...