Chandni

I'm not a fan of the whole structure here, why not put it all together instead of leaving a line open? Did you want to make your poem look "bigger" ...

Aha, nice nice ;) Nice rythem, the introduction (first stanza) suits me well. Your word-usage and word descriptions are nice and it all fits well together. Allthough I have to ...

Okay first off, the topic is over-the-top cliched how many times have we not seen this take a look around the forums and try to emphasize what's different. You use ...

And she posts something! :) as Colleen said, it was difficult to find the rhyming and the donnez-moi was indeed pretty akward, you said you couldn't find a word that ...

Hmmm, well the structure is well not the best. Your whole poem seems to be one huge sentence, where you begin with quoatation marks but where do they end? Pretty ...

Act of Love Come near me, I want your skin To slide on mine like it was sin. Lay next to my naked frame And know you needn’t any shame. ...

I haven't seen it before, so your question to "Better?" isn't likely to be answered by me. Overall I liked this, tight discriptions and a nice rythem. That line Colleen ...

Well okay, the structure is indeed as been said above, very disorientated. Try working a bit more organized with your lines here and there. With your words With your kisses ...

Lol, tattoos, I didn't quite think about that when I read it in addition I just thought it was another one of your not-meant-to-be-understood poems XD So there wasn't actually ...

Yes, I'm not too fond of the topic either, but that doesn't hold me up. You seem to be using a lot of comma's here, which some of them I ...

Okay here I go... Here I sit ignored each day. Who am I to be seen? I wait in the shadows to be discovered. He never comes to my rescue. ...

Ok. this wasn't bad, but rather okay. I'd suggest you to add more discription to this, it is too dull and doesn't bring an impact. I've seen this alone topic ...

Hey Brad, I found this a bit tweak to what I've read before, offcourse there is no need to compare, but I am used to seeing you write a little ...

Huh? If anything, (I, personally, think) it takes a lot more skill to write a poem that rhymes. If you ask me, poems should rhyme. How do you even know ...

Dun Dun Dun :) Nicely done, very well discripted and a nice usage of words. Some sentences are a bit long and overdone We are all good guys, [s]all[/s] bad ...