Celdover

Yoda, how did you know what I was going to say about this piece? Two months before June's review day, no less! Silliness aside, I thought this piece was cute. ...

Hello there. First things first, I shall talk about your technical writing, most notably about how you didn't divide this piece into paragraphs. This makes your piece very difficult to ...

Hello there. I have to agree with Whisperer down there. This piece is so short I'm not really sure what to make of it. Though if I had to go ...

Hello there. An old piece that never got a second opinion? Clearly this is the sort of situation review day is meant to remedy! Because this is such a short ...

Hello there! I know this piece is old, but today is review day, which is synonymous for your lucky day! Allow me to give you a second opinion here. First ...

Hello there. I must say, this narrator you have here really beats around the bush, doesn't he? All I could think about while reading this was "WOAH! Description overload!" at ...

Hello there. Drak has already covered most of the descriptive nitpicks I planned to address, so now I get to focus more on grammar and the actual content. Hooray! As ...

Hello there. I can see you're new to the site, so allow me to give you a bit of a pointer. Premises for stories are usually posted in the Writer's ...

Hello there. I can see that you're trying to deliver a message about drunk driving and how it affects people. That's nice and all, but there's one major problem with ...

Hello there. I can see why your friends might not have liked this piece. The topics you try to incorporate into your story are very adult in nature, and according ...

Hello there. I must say, you did a great job of portraying a flighty teenage spirit. There's just one major problem: there's really not much else. I'm left wondering exactly ...

Hello there. I must say, I actually enjoyed reading this piece, which I found a bit strange since I tend to dislike choppy narration and favor long, flowing lines of ...

It is getting annoying, that damn angsting of the viewpoint character. All joking aside, I must say that the first thing that stands out to me is the character's pointlessly ...

Hello there. I'm Dover and I shall be reviewing you today. First and foremost, I'd like to suggest that you proofread before you post. I found numerous grammatical and spelling ...

Hello there. First of all, I would like to thank Day for taking almost every criticism out of my mouth. Almost. Let's begin with this: I saw a middle aged ...