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Re: Dontae's Battle with the Past Chapter 2
Alright, hey Arah, Louis here for the second review. Once again, this was enjoyable, but lacks realism and description in many cases. Onto the nit-picks. When I stepped outside, something ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Dontae's Battle with the Past Chapter 1
Alright, this was submitted a while ago I realize, but I've never read/reviewed anything of yours, so I take review day as an excuse to do so. First off, this ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: The Encyclopedia of Arius: Salief
Alright, hey Thalizar, Louis here to review this for you. A quick note before I begin, you might want to try to add a line break between each paragraph/dialogue, it ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: .
Hey MM, Captain Crazy offering a belated review on this, since I felt like reading action, and had exhausted all other sources on YWS. As other stated, there are a ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Secrets of the Akkira: Chapter 1
Alright, hey Jay. Overall, this was a pretty good chapter, I think. It conveyed fairly well, and I couldn't spot any grammatical mistakes either. The nit-picks I'm going to... pick ...
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Re: Campfire
Hey, Rhe, Louis here to review. Well, this is an interesting piece, really. However, it has some grammatical nit-picks which could be worked on. It was a nice night. The ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Never gonna Forget ( Paul Lahote love story)
Since I’m such a nice person, and have left sanity long ago by a street corner, I’ve decided to review a snippet of your third chapter as well! Oh god. ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Never gonna Forget ( Paul Lahote love story)
Hey there again. Suicidal me, here to review, since I decided points were more important than my sanity, so I attempt a snippet of your second chapter. Well. While your ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Never gonna Forget ( Paul Lahote love story)
Alright, first impression. WHOA WHAT THE HOW MANY *face/desk* These are a lot of chapters. This is just one huge, mighty block of text that will scare the heck away ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: (Medieval story) Chapter 1-revised and completed but story needs title
Alright, creativeheart, Louis here to review. This is an okay chapter, I dig deer-hunting and knights and so forth. The main issues here were grammar and description, as I understand ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Mithila Penting
Alright, hey there sushantshubham, Louis here to review. I must agree with Epix, at first I thought 'Mithila Penting' was the name of a woman or something. Turns out you ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: The Diamond Fist (1)
Alright, hehi Bleus. Time for the reviews, as promised. First off, my general impression of this was it was pretty good. The grammatical errors were minimal, as all the errors ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: A Cold Morning
Alright cj2344, Louis here to review! Firstly, I assume the format was YWSese’s error, otherwise I really suggest you fix that, possibly make things larger, etc etc. Now, onto the ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Chapter one of a book I'm working on
Alright, hey mnkeygirl11, Louis here to review! The stadium was packed. The spectators, whom were all younger than eighteen sat huddled together; their eyes filled with fear and longing to ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Sword Fight
Hey yubbies! Ita, or Louis now, here to review! Firstly, this wasn't bad. There were no grammatical errors as far as I could spot them. And I do love me ...
Dec 30, 2012