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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Sincerely, Brain

    This is totally brilliant! Amazing! I can't say anything else! :D :smt023 The title is catchy by the way. I've only one nitpick: Next time LISTEN - You should put ...

    May 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Happy Birthday, Teenager

    Hello there. :) Nitpicks: Happy Birthday, my child! You’re now officially a teen. And according to the public, you’re impulsive and obscene. - Nice beginning. It's engaging. but you're now ...

    May 3, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Art of Dying

    Hello. :) Nitpicks: You knew you were in trouble when you stopped sweating. - I like this starting sentence. It pretty much makes the reader interested. You had finished off ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Script » General, General Re: The Adventures of Captain McAwesome Pants 2

    Nitpicks: CLEVER BOOTS: There is a lot that you can do. There is the mall, the movies, go see a show. Look at me; I’m going to a modeling show ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Neurosis

    I'm in the same page is the reviewers above. I didn't get it! XD But the wording is great. :) The problem with that though is I couldn't be sure ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Dearly Beloved

    RH! :D xD This is like the first time I read a work of yours and you impressed me! *standing o* :smt023 First, nitpicks: I am sitting right now in ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hi there. :) Nitpicks: Its just writing, they say Its much more than that - Correction: 'It's' That's much better, I murmmer - Correction: 'murmur' - Also, it's more correct ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Pull the Trigger

    Hello. ^_^ :D First of all, it's the title that made me click that link. XD Nice title. :) Nitpicks: Is life ever really that bad that it needs to ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: All's My Fault

    Hi, ehte. :) Sorry this took so long. >.< Nitpicks: Whom did her eyes search, in this vast ocean of vagabonds? - I don't think you need to put a ...

    Apr 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Pizza

    Hello. :) Nitpicks: “Papa can we go?” - Put a comma after 'Papa'. - Sol already mentioned this. Haha. :) Yeah it sucks to be me, - I think you ...

    Apr 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: "F" = Failure

    Hello. ^_^ Nitpicks: like a firework in July. - This is so unoriginal but I LOVE it! XD These troubled times, no ones’ to blame, - Correction: 'one's' But feelings ...

    Apr 12, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Turning the Tables(1.1)

    Hello, Shubhi. ^_^ Here I am as you requested. :) Nitpicks: (I've got a lot of nitpicks. >.< But this chapter is long! xD) I had lot on my mind... ...

    Apr 12, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Love You, Hate You, Miss You

    Hello. :D Catchy title. xD Sometimes seeing all of it is the highlight of my day. - I think you should put a comma after 'Sometimes'. I can see it ...

    Apr 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Do not click this.

    Hello. :) Nice title XD. a reason you clicked here, infact. - I think you should also just capitalize the first letter, like most of the lines. - Correction: 'in ...

    Apr 10, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: So You Sailed Away

    First of all, Sol, CONGRATS ON THE FEATURE! :D You did great! xD ;) Nitpicks: No, I know it's helpless. - I think 'No' and the rest of the sentence ...

    Apr 7, 2011


You flare, you flicker, you fade... And in the end, all your tomorrows become yesterdays.
— Megatron (Lost Light, by Roberts, Lawrence, Lafuente)