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Re: Sincerely, Brain
This is totally brilliant! Amazing! I can't say anything else! :D :smt023 The title is catchy by the way. I've only one nitpick: Next time LISTEN - You should put ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: Happy Birthday, Teenager
Hello there. :) Nitpicks: Happy Birthday, my child! You’re now officially a teen. And according to the public, you’re impulsive and obscene. - Nice beginning. It's engaging. but you're now ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: The Art of Dying
Hello. :) Nitpicks: You knew you were in trouble when you stopped sweating. - I like this starting sentence. It pretty much makes the reader interested. You had finished off ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Adventures of Captain McAwesome Pants 2
Nitpicks: CLEVER BOOTS: There is a lot that you can do. There is the mall, the movies, go see a show. Look at me; I’m going to a modeling show ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Neurosis
I'm in the same page is the reviewers above. I didn't get it! XD But the wording is great. :) The problem with that though is I couldn't be sure ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Dearly Beloved
RH! :D xD This is like the first time I read a work of yours and you impressed me! *standing o* :smt023 First, nitpicks: I am sitting right now in ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: deleted
Hi there. :) Nitpicks: Its just writing, they say Its much more than that - Correction: 'It's' That's much better, I murmmer - Correction: 'murmur' - Also, it's more correct ...
Apr 24, 2011 -
Re: Pull the Trigger
Hello. ^_^ :D First of all, it's the title that made me click that link. XD Nice title. :) Nitpicks: Is life ever really that bad that it needs to ...
Apr 24, 2011 -
Re: All's My Fault
Hi, ehte. :) Sorry this took so long. >.< Nitpicks: Whom did her eyes search, in this vast ocean of vagabonds? - I don't think you need to put a ...
Apr 18, 2011 -
Re: Pizza
Hello. :) Nitpicks: “Papa can we go?” - Put a comma after 'Papa'. - Sol already mentioned this. Haha. :) Yeah it sucks to be me, - I think you ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: "F" = Failure
Hello. ^_^ Nitpicks: like a firework in July. - This is so unoriginal but I LOVE it! XD These troubled times, no ones’ to blame, - Correction: 'one's' But feelings ...
Apr 12, 2011 -
Re: Turning the Tables(1.1)
Hello, Shubhi. ^_^ Here I am as you requested. :) Nitpicks: (I've got a lot of nitpicks. >.< But this chapter is long! xD) I had lot on my mind... ...
Apr 12, 2011 -
Re: Love You, Hate You, Miss You
Hello. :D Catchy title. xD Sometimes seeing all of it is the highlight of my day. - I think you should put a comma after 'Sometimes'. I can see it ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Do not click this.
Hello. :) Nice title XD. a reason you clicked here, infact. - I think you should also just capitalize the first letter, like most of the lines. - Correction: 'in ...
Apr 10, 2011 -
Re: So You Sailed Away
First of all, Sol, CONGRATS ON THE FEATURE! :D You did great! xD ;) Nitpicks: No, I know it's helpless. - I think 'No' and the rest of the sentence ...
Apr 7, 2011
