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Thanks for the replies! As for the dialogue, (which was the assignment right?) it was good, very believable and flowed well too, the only suggestion I could make for that ...

As others have said, yeah, it's one of those books you sort of have to read, but may not like. I read it my freshman year for English class. I ...

Wow. Nice. ^^I just wanted to say that. I hope to return later with a critique. Colleen

All- I definitely see what you guys are saying about extending it. I've tried! The problem I'm running into is that I don't know what to extend. I like the ...

I'm ba-ack! *wide grin* And now I shall finish my critique. *dons serious glasses* Regarding xanthan gum's comment: I think that the dramatics really add to the charm of this ...

It could be a prose-poem...but I doubt it. This sounds more like a journal entry than anything.

Colleen, the sixth of March was the day that Michelangelo was born. Gosh, see, I really should have put Wikipedia to good use to look that up and not sound ...

Ah! I knew I'd heard that word somewhere! In this poem, though, it might be perceived as out of place if not pretentious. Colleen

Thanks, Cameron! I see what you're saying, and I'll definitely consider your revision while I'm editing this. When I was writing it, the "I thinks" where probably there because I'm ...

Lighthearted indeed! Nothing to crit here, Claudette, it's just funny stuff. Gosh, do I understand, although I just tie mine back... Colleen :D

Wow, big change.

Oooh, yeah, that's a good idea! Or maybe names of places or made-up street names that sound Castilian. I love it when poems sound like they've just fallen out of ...

"...and you never truly knew the greatness you were"? That transition is awkward. It might work if you just took out the "and" and made it: In the hush of ...

Thanks, guys! I know this is far from my best work. The first two stanzas are boring, aren't they? I think it's just that the images are too conventional. I'm ...

Cadmium, after some reflection, the eyes reference does seem slightly off-topic, but it was originally meant to symbolize how the "heartbreaker" failed to see how they were perfect for each ...