Cabassi_Crime_Family

Ciao Kylan - credo che non hai pazenza? Eh? To the critique though. Let's begin on the straightforward. Brevity, it is said, is the soul of wit. It carries over ...

A cigarette dangled from the corner of Claude's mouth , [s]and[/s] smoke curled into the air, coalescing with the stifling gasoline fumes [s]oppressing[/s] inside the tent. He was hunched over ...

Outskirts of Riyadh, Saudi Arabia “Drone now in a holding pattern. We can pickle the target at any time, sir. I'm counting that the target has five or six SAMs, ...

Well done. A fitting end to the story. A very nice twist to the sandman story. Again, you could easily trim this down. There was nothing but his words, drenched ...

Intriguing, to say the least. I must first compliment you on your use of sentence structure and words choice to create a truly frightful adventure. There was a flutter above ...

Jon bit his sleep , mind racing for an excuse to travel alone. He came up empty. Perhaps that was meant to be lip? Ahh, Very pleasent. Easy to read ...

Ciao Phorcys. Arbitrary hit from the CCF , ragazzo. Imp ressions, then, vero? You have a dense style, apt in metrics of description, certainly in the atmospheric. In more specific, ...

Dream The actual dream aspect is not what makes it cliche or not, it is more of the content of the dream. The dream does not appear as cliche. The ...

I was pleasantly surprised in reading this. At first glance I imagined I wouldn't like it, but I rather did. The rhythm is solid and the rhyming is simple, but ...

I'd honestly like to be able to agree with your claim that this is completely original, but frankly, I can't. You'd be surprised just how many poems there are about ...

Once again, your habit of capitalizing the first letter of every line detracts from this piece. You really need to break out of that persistence, amico . My ears will ...

It’s not as though I’ve done anything to her, thought Martha, edging down to sit on [s]the[/s] a branch and resting her cheek against the coarse bark. First off, you ...

Alright, once again present are the staccato line breaks and lack of punctuation. When combined, these elements can greatly detract from a poem's flow, and I'm afraid that that's true ...

Fluent Sliding melody Bellows thought through Sweet vibration Coerced by finger, Thumb and bow. Resonate, fine 'cello, With my passion freed By someone else's song That flows through Tainted arm ...

Ciao Sam - critique il secondo allora , to be precise. The previous may have put the definition of brevity in illustration. But then, Imp hit that one, yes? LETTERS ...