Butterfinger

Wow. Great work here. It reads like it took no effort to write because it just came so naturally. I love how the ending has a blank line before the ...

You have quite the talent for writing! I really enjoyed reading this! I didn't realize there were more stanzas on the far right till I got into it, maybe it's ...

Hey there! I saw this piece and couldn't pass it by! I love how each stanza starts with "you see." when I read it, the voice is very strong and ...

Beautiful! I completely love it to pieces! My only suggestion would be to break it up a bit so it reads more like a poem. Maybe like this? Great job ...

Hey there! First I want to say I think you have a great choice in words in some of these lines. ex: consumed, aches. The con side to that is ...

Hey there! I have to agree that this piece is on the short side :) That's not a bad thing, but I would suggest fattening it up a bit. I ...

I really like the very first line of this piece. The word choice is great and I imagine the torment of a heart "chained in darkness." The rest is ok, ...

I love the idea of this poem. I really think you've got something great in the making! What I wanted more of is some expansion on the confusing jumbled thoughts ...

Hey there! I love to see different types of pieces that come from interesting prompts, and this one is great! I really think you have some great lines that work ...

Hi-ya!! Hmmm.....I feel like this is a great start to something more. It's building up to something then it cuts off! I'd love to read more, but this could be ...

Wow. One simple word that could swing drastically both ways. Wow in the sense that this was-no joke or offense intended- a huge run on, winded rant about drips. Wow ...

Wow, this poem really hit home. It reads like prose with the dead in rhyming and set up of the whole piece. I seriously don't have any critique nit picks ...

Hi-ya!!! Here's my comments!! Do you see a smile behind those blue eyes? I love how you bring the reader straight into the setting, and give us something to grab ...

Hi-ya! Here's my comments! My fingers twist the page, Love this line! It really takes the reader to the physical setting of this poem! A never ending cycle. Kind of ...

Hi-ya!!! First off- I'm a huge phantom of the opera fan!! Absolutely love it! Anyway! You've has got amazing writing talent! I would definitely enter it in the fair! Truly ...