Published January 4, 2014
It’s an interesting thing that happens to the light when teardrops rest between eyelashes, a glimpse of beauty to accompany the gaping hole in one’s heart.
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Hello, Subtle here for a review on review day! At first I thought this was a short story due to the format of this, and then I realized it said poetry. So, interesting poem format. Since everything is so collected and flows smoothly, this format is fine. I have to say, this is one of the best descriptions of tears I have read for a while. Though short, it is extremely well-written and the message here is beautifully said. I just love this poem, how you have described how tears are a window to the hurt in our hearts. To holes in our lives.
This is getting a like from me, I just love this poem. Wonderful wonderful work!
-S.s
I am confused. This is poetry, but it's not formatted like it.
so shall i say it can go like this:
There we go, it looks better than the way you have it right now. I think that is how you would want it in standard poetry form.
Hey, Spinelli. Happy review day! I have a review for you!
To be honest, this spun me around. I got stuck in my tracks at the end. I can barely see what you're saying. The poem is well written in all honesty. I guess, when one's crying, you can see the beauty in nothing really. Its one of these poems well written but confusing. The good thing is that I understood this more than Primer. I would like to see more works from you
Overall, good writing, just gets lost
Strange gives you..
6.5/10
Good job
Keep writing
Stay groovy my friend *Hair flips*
Paint the roses red, my dear
This is an evidence to the fact that it only requires a few words to show the beauty of anything on earth. Its the heart which writes sometimes, this is one is like that.
Hey Spinelli
I can imagine what this poem speaks about. It is a lovely concept and I wish I could read more.
Teardrops, eyelashes, glimpse, heart are words which are gems in here.
Only one opinion, you could have made the title better.
Anyways, this is an amazing poem. Enjoyed reading it.
*Claps*
Keep writing.
Love,
Krish
The Missing Piece here for a review! Perfect! I absolutely love this. I really can't describe it's beauty. It's not really a poem or a story. It's a flow of words that sound beautifully together. Bravo! I see no grammar errors so that's good! Great job! Love it! Keep writing!
~The Missing Piece
Beautiful! I completely love it to pieces! My only suggestion would be to break it up a bit so it reads more like a poem. Maybe like this? Great job
"It’s an interesting thing that happens
to the light
when teardrops rest
between eyelashes,
a glimpse of beauty
to accompany the gaping hole
in one’s heart."
I thought about it, but I realized it changed it too much. Made it feel more like a salad instead of a single noodle.
Wait, what?
Hahaha
I love your noodle 
Great job!