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Hey! This was a nice poem, and I like the way you executed the theme and also the ending, but I'm just not feeling it. There are a few things ...

No replies? Well, that shan't do! Though the tile beneath my feet was cold = "although" because "though" just means "but", and it doesn't indicate that there's another clause to ...

Ugh. YWS just ate my review. Sorry about that. But, to summarise, this was fantastic! I really enjoyed reading it; the pace was great and the word choices definitely worked. ...

Ooh, lucid dreaming! I love that! Although, sadly, I've only ever done it once. :( Wanna fall asleep again , he thought, Yeah, that first bit doesn't need to be ...

Hello, I'll bump this thread and review it. :) some of whom refused to let them wear anything other than baggy shirts, jeans and battered boots. Can these poor people ...

Hello, there. =) I'll skip grammar nitpicks and focus on the story itself. The hostage felt itself being sucked out and it fought tenaciously, clinging to the walls in defiance. ...

Hello. =) only a true "supreme overlord" The fact that you have put this phrase in speech marks makes it seem as if he is quoting what someone else calls ...

Hey Jess =) Welcome to YWS! Why not head over to the Welcome area and introduce yourself? I've done the nitpicks in the actual document below, and here I'll just ...

Hello. =) It happens all around us. I think this could be stronger by saying that it happens to us all, or maybe even: "You're going to die." It draws ...

Hello, writingcat! dark haired girl = "dark-haired" Though she looked normal enough, except for the bright orange streaks in her hair and silver nose-ring, there was a peculiar air of ...

Hey Galerius! Here by request. :) Sleep cocooned like a dew dancing among leaves Can you have "a dew" in the same way as "a water"? Neither make sense, but ...

Hey Jiggity! =} I've attached a file with all the nitpicks in it, and here I'll just focus all the other comments and whatnot. in another life they might have ...

Hello. Here by request. :) if it was still with that man Conditional clause - "if it were ". I agree that this sentence is quite confusing to the swift ...

Hey Teigue. This is so short! Also, I checked in your portfolio and saw that you've already submitted many more things you've review: it's a 2:1 ratio on reviews to ...

Hey! Here by request. I see you've already had a load of great reviews, so I'll skip the nitpicks and focus on anything I might be able to add. :wink: ...