Blackwood

Wow.... ummm you have something really funky going on with your punctuation here and the symbols are jumping all over the place. You are not supposed to have spaces. But ...

I like your idea of having these mini short stories but this reads more like a poem no matter how I look at it. Be it the use of rhyme ...

The plague has reached you. I'd just like to say, great work with rhyming, you have successfully done a good job here. However again you have forgotten punctuation at the ...

To be honesssssssssssssst....... the font, combined with the random placement of lines is kind of annoying and I feel like it takes away from the poem far more than it ...

Nice job. I am going to point out a couple of things for this review. The first thing is the start. In my opinion, starting with speech has never been ...

Sorry I didn't read the other parts so I am treating this as a singular extract. The first thing that stood out to me is your use of present tense ...

Ohhhhhhh Wow. I just got punched in the face by your opening sentence. And unfortunately I don't mean in a good way, princess. I know we have had a discussion ...

Ah, you have done the same thing with your poem as you did with the other one. What is with these chasms? With your title I highly suggest something more ...

I am going to be really honest with you, because people have told me this about my own poems, so I know that I say this with no disrespect, but ...

Dark and sexy. I like it. I had to go and find the original and read it so I had something to go off and compare how your version is ...

So this is a biography? Is this is a person that you know? This is a nice simple biography that addresses both facts and personal interests. I think that you ...

The chasms made this a nightmare to read. Please don't put those huge 3 line gaps in.For your review I am going to quote your whole poem and then place ...

Say hello the the black plague! Because of my last review and I forgot almost everything I wanted to say by the time I finished the chapter I am going ...

Hey there, the Black Plague has hit you. I am just going to go through step by step with this review and hopefully I can give you a few pointers. ...

Well this is a very effective way of portraying what you portrayed. I see a very technological medical world in your poem, with words with those connotations such as 'solutions' ...