BenFranks

Hey again! Another short, sweet gem of writing you have here! The structure and flow of your poetry is always a crowd pleaser and it doesn't let us down here. ...

Hey! My favourite thing abou this poem is the shortness which adds to the effect and impact, it's almost as if you haven't got long to tell us but you're ...

A lot better. Well done. Now that your structure is here we can read this with fluency and you've still maintained that pace. I don't know if you've combatted the ...

Hey there! I enjoyed the narrative voice and pace of this poem but there are some definate improvements you could pick up on: 1. Structure. I think your poem completely ...

I have to say that was a story that came with some big impact. The reaction you got out of me was more the want to shout at the lads ...

Hey there! Okay, your poem: This I love: I walk through the evil doors This place is filled with trashy whores. The say high school are your glory years So ...

Hey there! Here as requested :P - Anyway I see this has been nitpicked a lot, so I'll focus on content and development! :) Well what can I say? The ...

Yello Amy! :P Here as requested :) Any'oo, I'm not too good at poetry myself, but I'll give you an idea of what I think! XD Silence envelopes the music, ...

Hello again! I reviewed your first chapter as well because I thought it would help! :D Anyway here I am as requested ! Right'o, here are my thoughts and suggestions! ...

Hello there! 'Tis me as you requested! :) Well here are my thoughts and suggestions for this wonderful piece of literature of yours! (In italic blue, because blue's somewhat refreshing ...

Hey timmy, I'm Ben, here's some of my thoughts... Firstly what a brilliant way to start! What happened to the way things were, How the sunsets all seemed beautiful, Yet ...

Hello again! I have to say you're prologue was fantastic, so it'll be interesting read! Right, here are some of my thoughts... I think nearer the beginning you're going to ...

Hello again! Wow, another brilliant read you have here! (Thanks for having a look at my work by the way! You're a far better poet, I do admit! :D) Anyway! ...

I can't really pick out anything that hasn't already been suggested, so I guess I'll just give you my opinion of your poem! And I have to say it's ADORABLE! ...

Hey there iateyourdogx67! I'm Ben! :D - Welcome to YWS! Anyway! I love this short and sweet poem. It's just the perfect length in my opinion! One nit-pick I would ...