BenFranks

Hey Kylan! I think what you've done best here is given the reader beautiful selections of language and imagery. I think the biggest nitpick is a bit like waht Firestarter ...

Hey there! Your colour in language choice is truly exceptional! I especially enjoyed the gripping of these two lines: And the moon has gone a-hiding And the birds have ceased ...

Hey there! The reason why this was good (and I don't mean to be harsh but it probably is the only reason...) is that it made me smile. If it ...

Hey there! I rarely go onto fantasy fiction so what a delight it was to be treated with something like this when I did! I think your characters have already ...

~ Note: Rate this 16+ for strong language. Hello! I'm really sorry. Reading this is kind of saddening and its one of those stories that in a way you don't ...

'Ullo Howler! Well, this is , er, original. The reason why I have an unsurity is because although I think the concept is brilliant, I was a little confused with ...

Hey there! I see you've mentioned you're making edits on clarifying the conveyed message, so I guess I don't need to say anything there. XD But if you were wondering ...

Hey there! I think that was an interesting read. What I will say though is that content wise I'm not really goign away with anything. I realise that the poem ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! What a brilliant poem! That was stunningly powerful . At first I was a bit bewildered by the message you were getting across and I'm ...

Hey there Timmy! I have to say that your opening is absolutely brilliant! I used to be a nonbeliever, I doubted every notion. I think the "doubted every notion" is ...

Hey. I enjoyed this but give it a good thorough edit because I think in some points the fluency was disrupted by the lack of punctuation. It also slightly changed ...

juts typo XD Anyway the poem! (Hi, by the way) I think the second line of your poem is a little forced in rhyme. As much as I get the ...

Hey there. I like the sweetness in the message and effect of simplicity conveyed. It was inticing. What I will say though, is a little like Lydia's mentioned, you need ...

Hey dreamy, I liked this poem mainly due to rhythm and fluency. Thus, it was well punctuated :) It is just little things like this that could do with that ...

Hey there! Like Matt said there's a strong reliance on font and colour. However in my opinion this is good. I think this shows a take of your own poetry. ...