Bella

I really liked this -- its a sonnet, correct? I just wrote one of those! (is excited). I thought it was interesting, because you usually don't hear poetry from the ...

*Glomps Edward plushie and refuses to let it go* Squee! TWILIGHT! Okay, let's see how I can do... Edward = not perfect, but utterly amazing in his own flawful way ...

I really liked this, especially the line "suffer me a kiss." Something about that was just...wow. I don't think the two middle verses flowed quite as well as the first ...

Reida, to be prefectly honest, I like this...I cannot say why. It seems...mysterious, and written in a way that makes the reader think A LOT. I like poems that make ...

I thought this was pretty good, but not great. Twas rather hard to understand, and I stumbled over the words a lot. I found that some sentences really didn't fit ...

Alice, I just htought of this~~ Lifehouse would probably be a band most likely to sing this. It makes me think of Fairytales and Castles a lot, so I thought ...

Mad has a point. Most kids I know that cut, cut more when people make snide comments about them. I don't cut, but when other kids sit there and call ...

This was...different. It had a simple message behind it. But the rhythm was...hard to get. It didn't flow exactly. Some parts of it did, and some didn't. Just like some ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS, first of all! New members are always so much fun! I'm Bella! Also, another random thing that doesn't go along with your poem: I love your ...

First off, welcome to YWS! I'm Bella! Now, on to your poem~~ offence, but this poem nearly makes me afraid to comment. It's very..."in your face", for lack of a ...

The consept of hatred being a weed is good, I like it. I think you need to be a bit more descriptive with that though. Not so much about how ...

Your rhythm wasn't very strong, nor were you rhymes(sp?), but that can be okay sometimes. I thought it sounded more like a song verse than a poem stanza. Granted poems ...

Honestly, my favorite part is the last half. The first two stanzas were all right, but the last two just really hit something. The first two don't seem to be ...

So this is a free form poem, correct? If it doesn't need rhythm or anything. That's great, I love free form. But yours was pretty choppy. I'd suggest thinking out ...

be perfectly honest, I can't begin to describe how utterly confused I am right now. of course, part of that could be from the sugar high, and the fact that ...