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  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Eye

    So...this is a really old work. But I stumbled across it and thought I’d review it for something to do, lol! First of all, some of your phrases are a ...

    Aug 19, 2018
  • Other » General, Narrative Re: In the Memory of My Grandmother

    Overall, good work! :) As the two previous reviewers have already pointed out, there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors. Along with some awkward phrasing. However, the piece ...

    Aug 19, 2018
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Politics Re: The Roots and The Fruits of Fake News

    Wow... I knew fake news was a big issue in the United States, but I had no idea it was this bad and widespread elsewhere. It honestly makes me so ...

    Feb 25, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: Not *quite* knights

    Hey! BeTheChange here, aiming to help you make positive “changes” in your writing! (See what I did there? ....okay, that was lame.) This had an interesting set-up. Very old-fashioned-high-fantasy,

    Feb 25, 2018
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Realistic Re: Triple Talaq

    Where do I begin? 1. I am not a Muslim, but I should still be able to get your meaning through context. Unfortunately, that context is absent, making for a ...

    Oct 4, 2017
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: Just throwing away some cluttering thoughts.

    ...wow. I really like this. I can't say I understand your exact situation--I've never had depression. But I have severe anxiety, and on some level, I've felt this way too. ...

    Oct 4, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: the perfect student

    So, I'm going to come right out and say: I may not be able to do this poem justice with a review. It was really good, but I just got ...

    Oct 4, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 6.2

    I put it off for days, and I'm finally on the last chapter of Blotted Out before I move on to your next work, Fortissimo (hope I spelled that right). ...

    Jun 13, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 6.1

    The ship is slowly sailing! Eee! Anyway... *to self* You already complained enough about minor grammar issues...Snazzy doesn't need to hear about them again... Back to the review! I liked ...

    Jun 9, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 5.2

    Still some homophone errors, but nothing major that I haven't already pointed out. :) You had better not kill off, or come close to killing off, Johnny. Just kidding, it's ...

    Jun 9, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 5.1

    I'm starting not to like Martin..... "Immediately", "approximately", and "smooth" are misspelled. Also, you switch "of" for "have" again. Sorry if I'm being harsh about the grammar--I can be a ...

    Jun 9, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 4.2

    much for that potential ship...XD You use "though" when you mean "thought". "His ownself" would be easier to read as "himself". I liked how this ended, with the mild cliffhanger. ...

    Jun 9, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 4.1

    Nit picks: 1. "It must of been the kitchen."--you mean "have been". :) 2. "His voice sounded too sure and professional like." There are two moderate problems with this sentence. ...

    Jun 9, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 3.2

    All good things to report here! The grammar was better (except that ome spot where you use "defaults"?), the plot is getting really good, I felt a lot of emotions ...

    Jun 8, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Blotted Out - Chapter 3.1

    Okay, so. For once, I'm going to start with the positives! I like all the detail you're putting in. As someone who struggles with that a lot, I always admire ...

    Jun 8, 2017


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