BaByLa1989

Hi good day. My pen name is Babyla1989 i would be doing your review today. Please not that my focus would be on your grammar, spelling and your choice of ...

Greetings! I would be doing your review today, I am La. I really like the way you put this across, it is very unique. I do have an issue thou, ...

I really love the title it matches with the contents of your writing. additionally I really liked how you structure your paragraphs that was really good I commend you for ...

From my understanding, this piece is either about someone talking to julia or julia talking to someone. a monologue perhaps? Your paragraphs, the way your sentences are laid out should ...

Hi green tulip i am La and i would be doing your review today. I really like that way you compared a military child to that or a civilian child. ...

I tried to not let it all get to me. The word "all" to me was not needed in this sentence. This piece was really full of emotions, I was ...

Failure my friend, it hasn't been long! Even though many ignore you, I welcome you with open arms. For you have been there, through my good and bad. only through ...

Close your eyes Let it flow, Your thoughts are like the vast blue ocean. Let them say what they want (in this part i would have describe a dream and ...

Snap back into reality with the cruel assumption that people need proof of your suffering. Fall back in line and discover that any individuality, not yet explored is unacceptable. Your ...

it was a nice peace. I really did not see the mystery or the suspense depicted in the story. " When I was growing up, I was always afraid of ...

Your poem was real nice but I think that it ended too abrupt. What I would have done is: "He loves the way I greet him each day. It brings ...

sorry for involving my personal feelings, you are right. when writing two lines is not a poem. it short and the essence of what you are trying to portray is ...

definitely it would not last... lusting after someone never does. eventually after you get to know the person beyond their good looks and charm they are as normal as can ...

I definitely agree with you pigeon. Two lines really? waste of my time. Thank God you have a mother who wants to see you do good in school, thank God ...

awwww, this is so sweet... I love it... keep writing and keep up the good work. :D