AyumiGosu17

Hello! Mama Weave here for a review. First of all, welcome to YWS. I hope you like it here. I got a lot of help with my writing through this ...

Good afternoon! Ayumi here to do a review for you :) Your title caught me, because it's actually pretty relevant to me. We have an exchange student who just joined ...

3: Things to Improve The first thing I noticed was that you're writing in a present tense. This is pretty neat, and I don't see it very often because of ...

I can feel the emotion in this poem. It is raw, it is powerful, it is overwhelming. I love how you've created a stack of juxtapositions here: reality vs. imaginary, ...

1. What do you think of the setting of this poem? Does it have a 'sense of place' and how might that 'sense of place' be improved? The setting confused ...

Love, love, love the lyrics! I was picking up early on that this might be a Christian lyric, and the final stanza/outro confirmed it. Your use of inference/implication is very ...

3: Things to Improve I'm not sure how I feel about this poem. The language is rigid and tense, although the content is much more expressive. SH is the product ...

There is a mysterious quality to this poem. I love the vaguity, but also the rhyme. The first half was very rhythmic, almost like a rap song. I love that ...

I'm assuming this is for an assignment, considering the choice of the topic and the format, so..... teacher mode activate! I'm going to break it down paragraph by paragraph and ...

There is so much pain and emotion in this piece, it almost feels real. If that's your goal, great job. If that's your reality, I'm so sorry. It's not identical, ...

WOW! I saw the title and it instantly reminded me of a song I've been listening to lately with a very similar title ("Dancing with the devil" by Demi Lovato). ...

Good morning! I'm going to use a Stairs & Stars method to review your short story this morning. Stairs - Things to improve on I love how you're attempting historical ...

I couldn't help but hop on another one! I won't be so long-winded this time. I noticed one case of a misused homophone, and like I said on your other ...

3- Things to Improve I noticed while I was reading your poem that there are some misused words. It's pretty common, and it's a really easy fix. you come with ...

1. What do you think of the imagery (mainly sensory descriptions like sight, sound, smell, etc.)? Are there any contrasting parts you notice? I found it very interesting how you ...