Asith

I must say, the unsettling ending was done rather well! I'm a huge fan of these types of short stories -- the types with twitsted and unnerving endings -- but ...

I like the honesty! Since it's not really a narrative, and is very short, my critique is limited, but I would like to commend your ability to put your feelings ...

Hi! This is definitely an interesting story. You have great, creative ideas - and that's necessary for any good writer! Two things you may want to look up: 1) Show, ...

Hi! I like the story, it's gripping. Developing a story using entirely character interaction is pretty cool, and I think it works well here. For a story that's so short, ...

It's been a while since a story has actually made me gasp out loud. And I suppose that was the point of this, so I'm here to say that it ...

Blown. Away. Genuinely the best thing I've read in a while! I love your little hints of realism that you throw in. Mimsy; spotify; the hairbrush; the texts; and even ...

Definitely a fair prologue! Seems like this could open up into a great story with a great premise. Personally, I'm excited to read one these types of stories but with ...

WOAH, talk about an exciting premise! I love the idea of a human being grown as a time bomb to spread an epidemic - it's very up-my-alley! This'll probably be ...

Haha, the title looked familiar but I didn't even realise that I'd already read the prologue because of how different this is! Regardless, I enjoyed it - perhaps even more ...

I love speculative fiction like this! Yours is a really fun concept - just the type of thing I enjoy reading too. The beginning of the story is something I ...

This is... strangely written, to say the least. The premise is there, but needs developing. Characters need to be people readers can invest themselves in, not just pawns to move ...

An interesting concept! You have a brilliant vocabulary of vicious animal words - all the clawing and slashing and biting. The actions are dramatic and the wide use of words ...

Hello - loved your title! Gonna do a short review to just note a few potential improvements. Your second paragraph is a very strange place to begin a paragraph. It's ...

Ooh, this is a brilliant improvement! The prequel to Nowhere is great - it's exactly the type of thing I wanted you to explore in the previous versions of the ...