Asith

Hello! This piece already has a lot of reviews, but I can't help but give my two cents as well, especially since I think this is a perfect example of ...

Hi again! I've read two of your creepy-ish short stories now, and this one is my favourite! I'd go as far as to say it's drastically better :p I love ...

This is excellently written! I really love the style you've gone for, especially with how you describe the environments and atmosphere while sticking within the character's point of view. The ...

This is pretty much the perfect next step for the story! I liked how straightforwardly you brought out Finn and Jaiden's relationship; I think it's actually more effective than trying ...

Hi! I love creepy short stories, and I'm quite partial to writing them, so I thought I'd leave a review. Bear in mind that I liked the story, even if ...

Hey! Although this is an old post, I thought I'd review it anyway, mainly because I was shocked at how much I actually enjoyed it. At face value, it doesn't ...

I like this! The premise is intriguing, to say the least. I think you've got the idea of a good plot down, so I'm going to focus on the writing ...

An interesting poem! I like the contrast you try to bring between how bad we feel when we're sick and how we take health for granted. Pairing that with the ...

What an incredible title! The first part of the extract was what really pulled me in. It's a very well-done image that you've produced. I think it could be cool ...

Hi! Happy review day I like the extract, it's actually one of the more well-written pieces I've read on here. You have good understanding of pacing, plot, and description -- ...

Happy review day, team blue :p I'm starting to enjoy these types of stories that use dialogue as their primary plot-mover. You have a very decent grasp on how to ...

Your casual/cartoon-comedy tone is actually pretty funny to read, surprisingly. It's never the type of tone I'd use, but I'm glad it works for your story. A piece of advice ...

Here because of "fandom blind friendly" :p I have to say, as someone who hasn't ever met these characters, you've done a good job of introducing them anew instead of ...

I'm not even someone who generally enjoys poetry, but this one was nice! The rhyming scheme flowed well, even in my untrained head (although the first line seemed a little ...

I really enjoyed this concept! It can be hard to write about something so over-the-top but still keep it grounded in reality like you did . Kudos. I do wonder ...