ArcticMonkey

Hi Hope19! I thought that these lyrics have a nice structure, and the message your are trying to portray is very clearly shown. However, I do have quite a few ...

Hi haven! I really liked how these lyrics were in more of a story-telling form. I've always liked when songs do that, because it makes me feel like I was ...

Hello, kay0rys28! I totally get the message behind this poem, I think it's a feeling that a lot of people go through in their teenage years, and even sometimes beyond ...

Hi dcar! I imagine this story being told out loud by a storyteller. I generally did like this story, I liked the end and how there was sort of a ...

Hi tennishead! Honestly, it wasn't until the last section where I felt like I was enjoying this piece. In a way that's really good, one of the strong points here ...

Hi BoyVsInternet! Well you certainly know your way around creating beautiful imagery and descriptions. Everything was so vividly explained and, although a bit too much at times, was a nice ...

Hi rainynight13. I see you've joined recently, so welcome to YWS! As a general idea for a poem, this is something that has loads of potential. Lots of emotion could ...

Hiya, lost! Here to review :). I thought that this was quite an amusing story, obviously Jessie's back story was less so, but I like the use of the ugly ...

Hello, TigersMoon, here to review! You have got an interesting plot here and you're already creating an empathetic character, by giving Kaia a poorer status in this world. I also ...

Hi, goddessathena! (cool username) A strong point of this piece was your language and description, which is especially shown in the first paragraph, it really draws the reader in an ...

Hi, Skydreamer! What a beautiful song, and good on your for posting the voice part as well. As a side note, I hope you have that recorded somewhere else because ...

Hi, Royal! I thought this was quite sad, and the last sentence was spine-chilling stuff. I've only read a tiny segment now, but I think your plot idea is really ...

Hiya, Flite! I preferred this to the previous part, probably because there was a lot more action and I'm an adrenaline-junkie, but I just think the pace was much better. ...

Hi TGS! I will start off with what I liked about the song, assuming the first seven lines I think are the chorus, I thought that was quite a solid ...

Hiya, Deanie! It's been a while since I've reviewed any prose of yours and I really have to say from the bottom of my heart that your writing style has ...