Liu was not accepted. He was always the different one. His whole family was very Buddhist, but he didn’t agree. He didn’t want to be religious at all. He thought it was useless and wouldn’t get him anywhere. His family thought that he was like them. They wanted him to be a monk so he didn’t have to pay taxes. Little did they know, he was nothing like them and he would never be a monk.
When they did find out about how he felt, they were embarrassed. They were also angry. They thought that he was stupid. So stupid that he didn’t deserve to be part of their family. So they cast him out, with a few possessions, some millet (his favorite food), and the wool clothes on his back. He was so angry that he took it with stride. He thought they didn’t appreciate him, and he was right. He had always wanted to make things, to be an artist or craftsman or something like that. So he set out.
What should he make? He had heard that a place where tea was made was close by, and started walking to it. After the long 5-day trek, he finally arrived. He was so tired he felt like he would collapse of fatigue. The master of tea was very accepting of everyone, and took Liu under his wing. The master showed Liu all these amazing things about tea, all the work it took to harvest the plant, the way they were left out to wither, and the rolling. Oh, Liu loved the rolling. All the patience it took to crush the leaves just right so the flavor comes out to the air, it was amazing. And it started to smell like tea, that amazing, delicious smell that he used to have all the time at home! But home was gone now. No matter what, he was glad it wasn’t just medicine anymore.
This master also taught him about the origin of tea. Apparently, once a man named Shennong was sitting under a tree. He was thirsty, so he boiled up some water to drink. When he was about to drink it, some leaves fell in. The result smelled delicious, and Shennong (name meaning “the divine farmer”) was intrigued by the fragrance and decided to drink some. He thought it was delicious and shared it with the world.
Liu loved the master as well, that kind old soul who had told him every little detail about tea production. He was quite old, but he could make the best tea. His kindness enveloped you and made you really happy. His warm smile and nice, soft voice would make you feel like tea production was the most exciting thing in the world!
But there was something wrong. Liu just didn’t really feel like tea was for him. It kind of felt wrong just doing it. So he decided to leave. He was very sad, but not nearly as sad as the master. The master had took him in and acted as if Liu was his own son. But now he was leaving. So Liu packed his stuff, said his goodbyes and was off.
The tea master had pointed him in the direction of a paper factory. When he made it to the paper factory, he was greeted by a much younger master. This one had inherited the title from the old master, who had recently died. The young master was very happy all the time, and gladly showed Liu the process. Liu loved beating the mix with the hammer then dipping in the mold. The satisfaction each time the hammer went down was immense.
The master was a happy young man, who loved to smile and teach. The way the instructions easily flowed out of his mouth was amazing. He taught so well and wanted the world to know. He said he had mastered the art in a few months, and that Liu was incredibly fast already.
But again, something was wrong. He didn’t really feel at home. So again, he set out. The paper master was again sad, but was better at hiding it. He said his smiling goodbyes to each worker. Sadly, he didn’t know the location of any other factories. So Liu just started to wander.
Liu, sad that he had nothing left to do, sat down against a tree. He thought about all he had done, all he had learned. Then, it hit him. ‘It’, in this case, was a branch. Of a tree. He was badly injured. Then, someone found him. Liu never did learn his name or really see his face well. He hauled the tree off of him, helped him, and left. Though before he left, Liu remembered him saying one thing: “I am always with you.”
Liu thought about what had happened. His first thought was how evil trees were. Then he decided he would go back and see his family. He realized that they only wanted the best for him. He would try to convince them that Buddhism was not the path he wanted to follow. He wanted to be a craftsman. Maybe he would open up his own place, where he would make something. So Liu went back home and told his family. It turns out they had been worried sick about him. Then he said farewell to them again, promising he would visit, and set out to open his own place. A place where he would find people who could make everything and give them the materials they needed.
That is the story of Liu Gao, a chinese man who lived during the Tang dynasty, was cast out, and found his calling.
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Hi dcar,

Mailice here with a short review!
We have before us a kind of fairy tale or legend, probably told to us by a storyteller in the market. At least that was my first impression when I started reading the story and wondering what Liu would experience.
I am positively surprised about the course of the plot and that everything had a good ending. I think it also expresses that the message is something like "Work hard and you'll be richly rewarded" or "Find your own way and do something you enjoy." That gives the story a certain distinctiveness in the narrative that I like.
However, I also find that the writing style has kept it somewhat simple. As mentioned, if the story were narrated, I think there would be no problem there, so that younger people can follow the story, but as written text there are some places where I think you would do better there, to rewrite the story a bit. Here for example:
As spoken word certainly very good, but written, something seems a bit simplistic and simplistic and I think that's something that comes out a bit in the whole story. You're left with the simple kind of thing and that takes a lot out of the actual story, where I think that would have a different effect if you could rewrite it a bit.
That doesn't mean that the story is bad in any way, but it makes me feel more like we're looking at a transcript that needs some work.
Have fun writing!
Mailice
Hi dcar!
I imagine this story being told out loud by a storyteller. I generally did like this story, I liked the end and how there was sort of a moral to be learned. Although it was really short, I got somewhat of an idea what was going on in terms of the plot, which I thought was story. So well done!
Now, I thought this was a bit rushed. A lot of things happen in this story, and it was a bit difficult to just keep up with what was actually going on. Because it's quite a short piece, I think you could take the time to stop and describe things a bit more, just to explain what's going on. I mean, just some more descriptions on the surrounding area would be good as it adds a bit more variety to your writing.
Also, if you read this back, you might notice that a lot of your sentences start with 'he' or 'they' which doesn't make this the most exciting read. However, I do understand that when you're writing in the third person it's quite hard not to, but just try starting your sentences in a different way. For example, you could use adverbs such as 'carefully' or 'slowly'.
My final suggestion is to add more on how your narrator is feeling. You begin to do this but I feel that there could be a bit more, because they've obviously been through a massive journey in their life, so I think more could be added on how they're feeling.
That's all from me, I thought this was good but just a bit too rushed. Try and slow down your writing with more descriptions and more thoughts from your narrator. I hope this helps, feel free to ask me any questions or if you'd like another review on anything. Keep writing,
~ArcticMonkey x
Thanks very much for your review. I agree with your points, all of them, and it's great that you did this, however I did this for school as a short story (one or two pages) and had a small time limit. I would have changed many of those things were it not meant to be a very short story. Again, thank you very much for your review.
Think it is good... like all of the history...
I really like how you described multiple inventions of ancient China. It was very interesting.
I am a little confused about how the stranger who saved him said “I am always with you.” Who is this guy and why would he be "always with him" Was one of the previous masters following him?
You said that Liu had heard of a close-by tea shop. If it was close by, why would it take 5 days for him to get there? To me, walking for 5 days is a pretty long ways away.
Other than that I really enjoyed all the details you added with the making of the paper and tea, as well as the story of the first tea. It was very interesting.
-amac
The I am always with you part is supposed to be something that you can decide on so there is some of your imagination going into it. The five days part was in fact something that I did wrong and may change at some point but you could imagine him walking slowly and navigating some small amount of strange terrain. Thanks for the review.
I like it
This is a very good story