Archer

I like how you convey the apprehension and anxiousness of both people here. I actually found myself getting nervous while reading this piece! You also did a good job with ...

I agree with Karzkin. I think the poem is good up through the first nine lines. The sense of neighborly familiarity, a night fog, thunderbees, all give a sense of ...

As with your previous chapter, you really need to proofread this. You refer to Peter's mom as "my mom," and misspell "Whose" and "Who's," as well as "hear" and here" ...

Hey braydog, As Buggie already mentioned, I think you really need to clean up the punctuation here. You have missing periods, incorrect capitalization, and a lot of missing commas. However, ...

Haha, the short description made me laugh so here I am to review! I think what you're getting at in this piece is a glimpse into the mind of someone ...

I thought this was a great personal essay. Really good job. Here's why I thought it was great: - First, you begin by setting a sound foundation for what you ...

Interesting essay. I disagree, but that's a subject for another day. Looking at your essay, I see three over-arching themes here: Earth is being abused by technological progress, humanity is ...

Like Alfonso, I enjoyed your second poem more than the first. I like the use of Biblical allusion as it gives the poem an added gravitas that it would not ...

It's an interesting metaphor. From what I gather, you're comparing the multiple options you can take in life to traveling along different roads. Sometimes you start going down a road ...

Since this essay is a response, there are probably some things you assumed the reader would know when reading it. For example, I had to look up who the Helots ...

I'm not a big fan of using single quotes instead of double quotes (' vs ") because it's confusing. It makes a little harder to read. However, that aside, I ...

I like how you begin this chapter a lot. It pulled me in immediately as it was interesting and it painted a good picture. I haven't read the previous chapters, ...

Not here to critique, but just here to say that I thought this was beautifully written. I think niteowl is right that the greatest art is the art people make ...

This is interesting, but it's also very condescending. Instead of saying that every person has their own path to God, you're saying that only the path that you yourself have ...

I think this would work really well in just the journal format. A diary from the point of view of a soldier in a futuristic war could be really cool. ...