Arashi

I could kiss you hahaha its nice to be appreciated lol

I think its an amazing poem you get right to the point. The last few lines could use some work to do the poem the justice it deserves otherwise great ...

Great poem could use some work other than that great storyline. Keep it up!

Its lacking something that I cant quite put my finger on any suggestions? Much thanks Arashi

It has potential if you work around it. You have a great storyline you just need to work on it a little more. Overall it was a nice concept I'll ...

Lol haha I should have said "where will I go from here?" sorry my bad I wanted it to be her silent unheard plea thanks for the comment you rock! ...

Very raw and real I liked it. I think almost everyone will be able to relate to this poem its emotional and in some ways kind of beautiful. Your poem ...

I'm dizzy seriously lol dont want to imagine spinning ever again haha lol great poem has a serious note but well played out. I liked the last line..arent we all ...

I loved it but... hey maybe I'm biased I do love snow! lol jk it was a great read but I think maybe you should do something more with the ...

You know what? I have decided that when I do get around to publishing I will pay someone to do it for me lol thanks for the advice I appreciate ...

Hello anyone who reads this lol I wrote this yesterday and finished it today so what do you think? I'm feeling iffy about it :( Arashi

Its nice feels like first love loss type of thing. I like it great job on making the words flow they had a nice ring.

I like it I think it has potential keep at it and put in the swan bit if you want... might change the poem.

Its an exceptional piece of work. Keep on writing like this and I guarantee you'll forget the little people lol jk "Rage the sage he knows too much a book ...

Right I will bear that in mind hahah I remember this one time I changed my whole poem because my friend wanted me to I ended up almost killing her ...