Published November 12, 2008
Spinning, spinning.
In endless circles.
What's the point?
Where does it lead?
When you are spinning, spinning,
In endless circles.
Around again.
Spinning.
Time stops.
Or does it start?
Does it really continue?
In endless loop of insanity?
What's the point of it?
Spinning, Spinning
In circles.
Life does not stop,
But does time?
Maybe. Maybe not.
How can you understand anything?
When it's all spinning, spinning
In endless circles.
Doomed to continue,
A hopeless, jumbled mess.
If I could stop,
Maybe I could sort it out.
But I can't.
Like everything else,
I'm just spinning, spinning
In endless circles,
Spiraling out of control.
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Well, it looks as if Clueless has gotten all the grammar mistakes. Overall: this is an interesting piece. The repetition works well here. As for rhythm and all those other poetic things, I don't know.
That was good! It was humerous and very light. A great think to perk up my day. =) Bravo. There were a few grammatical errors tha I'm sure you could find, but just in case.....
"Spinning, spinning.
Endless circles.
What's the point?
Where does it lead?
When you are spinning, spinning,
In endless circle.--circleS. or if you want to keep it circlE and AN right before endless.
Around again.
Spinning.
Time stops.
Or does it start?
Does it really conitnue?
In anendless loop of insanity?---anendless=an endless.
What's the point of it?
Spinning, Spinning
In circles.
Life does not stop,
But does time?
Maybe. Maybe not.--- that was such a great way to end the stanza!
How can you understand anything?
When it's all spinning, spinning
In endless cirlces.
Doomed to contine,
A hopless, jumbled mess.
If I could stop,
Maybe I could sort it out.
But I can't.
Like everthing else,
I'm just spinning, spinning
In endlees circles,---endLESS as I'm sure you know. =)
Spiraling out of control."
that was great. thank you for posting it.
--clueless--
I'm dizzy seriously lol dont want to imagine spinning ever again haha lol great poem has a serious note but well played out. I liked the last line..arent we all spiraling out of control? Nicely done keep on writing