Arashi

I dunno I didnt want to change anything to be honest I was going through something when I wrote this so it just feels better left along but I get ...

For anyone who reads this I was yooooooung when I wrote this not that I'm old now lol

Amazing like nothing Ive ever read before. Great job I'm speechless lol your poem was a unique read. Beautifully done.

Hahaha nice one lol you could have added the consequences of gossip maybe? dunno but overall nice general ideal well played out.

I agree as well its been said and done but I feel like you can add something more to this poem? dunno nice read though keep at it :)

It perfect very inspiring haha no other words for it I felt like I was almost transported there! Great job let me know when you have another poem out.

I like it :) nice beginning and I loved how you made it more personal and summed it all up so well at the end. Great job

Beautiful and inspiring the love that you show in your poem. Its real and a bit raw which isn't necessary a bad thing. Keep on writing :)

Okay umm where to start? lol you have a definite storyline its jumbled and confused your only 14 so realize and let go... edit here and there and the poem ...

Very well put but you could add something more kinda of have the words clipped of one another? to make a more drastic affect? dunno but great poem I would ...

Very nice and WELCOME to our little corner of the universe :)

I agree some things should remain a mystery always keep em guessing! lol your first poem? where have you been? haha jk You should keep on writing because its obvious ...

WELCOME! lol nice poem had a good flow nice way to start it of I like the last kiss bit!

It feels very Van Gogh to me thats a compliment haha I meant in a good way. Your poem is haunting piece of work but also beautiful. Nice job keep ...

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