Published December 3, 2008
Don't know how much more I can take
my life's already complicated as can be
feel like I'm going to break
may as well give up I've had enough
you whisper in my ear
things that only I can hear
not like I don't want to believe
what your telling me
happened before
whose to say it wont once more
you hold me close
show me the way
help me see its not impossible
I can hope and dream
a simple kiss is all it takes
magic is real it's right here
often you remind me
nothing happens not the way we want it to
one thing that's always true
love will see it through…
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I dunno I didnt want to change anything to be honest I was going through something when I wrote this so it just feels better left along but I get what youre saying thanks for the comment I'll take it into consideration.
Much love
Arashi
LOL
But the end... Maybe you could do better.... Keep on writing!
So if you were young, why didn't you reviewed it before post it now that you're older but not old (lol)? Anyway that's what I think.
You have to capitalize some words in the beginning of some sentences. You have to put some ' in some words. Overall (not that there's much mistakes) I liked it
For anyone who reads this I was yooooooung when I wrote this not that I'm old now lol