Published November 19, 2008
I've finally realized the truth
this soon unto my youth
you couldn't walk a mile in my shoes
I finally have a chance to choose
As for my choice, if death is on my side
i choose suicide
she's finally helped me to see
there's no one to care for me
All I've ever known was a lie
now I see the bright side
there's a razor all I have to do
is cut straight through
Maybe then someone will notice..........nope never mind
NO ONE CARES!!!!
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Very well put but you could add something more kinda of have the words clipped of one another? to make a more drastic affect? dunno but great poem I would have liked to see it have a different ending overall keep it up!
Ok... I liked it ! My favorite part was:
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you couldn't walk a mil ein my shoes
[you couldn't walk a mile in my shoes]
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It isn't noone it's no one.
Anyway these are minor mistakes. I liked it