AquaMarine

I agree with Hope about the slight forced rhyme and the cliché. You have a nice style, but that's really all this poem seems to me: nice. It's not an ...

Hey there! I really like the simplicity of this. You pull of the short lines and rhyme scheme quite well. It adds to the feel of the poem, and creates ...

Hey there! This is going to be a short review because I don't have much time. This is a lovely analogy. I'm a big fan of Autumn myself, so I ...

Hey there! Ok, so as people have said this is some pretty nice imagery you've got running through your poem. Very nice indeed. I would quite like to see some ...

Hey there! So, I really liked this poem! Like Snoink said, it doesn't exactly fit with any creation stories that I know, so I'm not sure if this poem is ...

Hey there! So, my problem here is that you've attempted to put a rather large subject of a poem, complete with question and all, into a very small poetic format. ...

Hey there! You have quite a nice rhyme scheme, here. It's not too forced. It's kind of simple, actually, but that works with what you're doing. The rhyme, for me, ...

Hey there! So, some of the imagery you've used here is powerful, very powerful. The word 'holocaust' alone has huge implications, so I guess it's a good word to use. ...

Hey there! Wow, this is long! Kind of off-putting for readers, you know. Maybe you could split it into seperate poems. They could each have something to say that's linked, ...

This is quite lovely! As you said, you've made some it simplistic, which nonetheless adds to the feeling of nothingness that is so tangible throughout your poem. It's really good, ...

Hey there! I think, as people have said, that it would be nice if here you branched out from just describing this, to exploring this. Go deeper than just the ...

Hey there! You have a lovely writing style, you really do. It's kind of unique, which is lovely, and it works with the poem that you've written. I do think ...

Hey there, You seem like one of those infinitely lucky people who manage to pull off a rhyme scheme in poetry without seeming too forced and while actually making the ...

Hey there! So, for this poem I agree with Snoink. Rather than centring round the story of yourself, why not try writing more about the actual emotions of the debate, ...

I actually really liked this poem! The linking and repetition worked well for me, it really did. It feels like you've thought it through, which is nice. It all works ...