AquaMarine

Hey there! I really liked this. As Van said, you've got all the important points down to pat which is a lovely thing to see. This reminded me somewhat of ...

Hey Timmy! Inhave to agree with Icicle in that I didn't know the riders you were talking about were ghosts until you explained that. Why not either add a new ...

Hey there! So, I really liked this piece. Your rhyme scheme isn't too bad at all; it definitely isn't that forced which is a lovely thing to see. Your rhythm ...

Hey there! I just want to say that it's really great of you to have picked this subject. I know people close to me have suffered from it, and it's ...

Hey there! This is nice, I really enjoyed it! Your description is beautiful, and you write in a lovely style. The rhythm was odd in occasions, but other people have ...

Hey there! I loved this. My favourite parts were most of the parts in italic, they were kind of beautiful. I don't know whether this'll sound strange, as I've spent ...

Hey there! Well, I'm basically repeating what others have said, but I think you need to deliver this better. At the moment, with the rhyme scheme and lack of poetic ...

Haha, Jiggs, this is awesome. As Van said, epic! :D I'm not actually going to be constructive here, because this doesn't need it. The end made me laugh a lot, ...

Hey there! Hmm. I quite like the whole visual effects thing. At the same time, I do think that the poem should be able to be effective without visual aids. ...

Hey there! I ... think I like this. I'm not really sure. It's kind of cool, the way that it doesn't make sense, but at the same time I'm kind ...

Hey there! As Hope said, you use a mixture of old and modern English. To me, the language in the poem is kind of scattered, and not very well used. ...

Hey there! Gosh, this is lovely. The imagery used and the way it's all written is really beautiful. I've reviewed A LOT of poetry in the last few days, but ...

Hey there! This is kind of good. I think that you need to work on a few things. Firstly would be the emotion in the poem. I can tell that ...

Hey there! So, I think that here you're just talking about what you want to do. You make no mention of why, of how, of anything else. This makes the ...

I really liked this! It's different, and it's lovely. Your rhyme scheme works so well. It's not forced, and it really brings your poem to life as it's read through. ...