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Hi, So, In terms of description and quality of vocabulary this piece is already very good. You build up tension very well in the beginning, and the dream was a ...

Hi, Ok, so aside from a couple of grammatical things that I'm sure you'd probably pick up on if you read through it (that should be those, whom should be ...

Hi RWG, Nice to meet you and hope you're well :) 1. I liked the phrasing, things like 'the boy was shock' create very powerful imagery, which is good. 2. ...

Hi, Well - that was definitely a good read. I found it interesting how you had all the biblical references in there, it felt like it definitely added to the ...

Hi, Just wanted to say that I like your poem; I'd want to spend them somewhere far away, with a pen in my hand and compassion in my heart Especially ...

Hello, So, here to review. You put a lot of details into it, straight away, which is good as long as you have a very clear idea of what will ...

Hi, I'm ready for it. Ready to review :P So I liked the whole storytelling thing you have going on here, together with the whole rhyming thing it makes your ...

It's so vivid, I like how it describes a single moment - through the card. I'm not really sure where the masks fit into the ... scheme of things, but ...

'Revealing that what can burn can also set free.' ^This. From what I've read (I'll be honest at the moment it's all of about two poems) you write with the ...

Heya, For a first draft beginning this is good. It has all the components of a very good idea for a story. What I think you should do now is ...

Hello, First off, I disagree. I don't think this is bland. I think that this is full of emotion and has a very good structure. I also liked the title ...

This left me with my mouth open like...omg. The intense emotions that this portrayed, of her leaving her boyfriend and how she doesn't believe in ...like anything anymore and the ...

Hi, I want to read more. So, this as a prologue has achieved its purpose; which is good. I do think you could go through and edit for grammar. Little ...

Heya, So - I liked the idea behind this story, the whole bodyswap thing and you made Rachel's reaction very realistic and human,not too OTT which was good. If you ...

Hey, So mostly I came to read this because it said it had me in the story and I'm in a bit of a strange mood (bad day...) but then ...